Argument Essay
Assignment Score: 3.5
Writing quantity
1. You have written 409 words.

2. I count a total of 3 paragraphs.

3. You have written 17 sentences.

4. You have written 0 question.

Essay structure and content: 46%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 42%

Opening:
Technology holds a significant place in today's world.

I was expecting to find a question mark at the end of the first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to start your essay with a question to engage your reader's attention. Try questions like these: Have you ever seen...? or Did you know that...? Your score for this feature = 0/100


I was unable to detect any errors in your first sentence. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. Your score for this feature = 0/100


You have chosen climate change as your topic, but your introduction only contains one climate-related word. Use more for a higher score. Here are some words I expected to encounter in a discussion on this topic: climate, fossil fuels, global warming, greenhouse gases, IPCC, PPM, CO2, GHGs. Your score for this feature = 60/100

Thesis:
People from other professions including teachers in schools or professors in a college can use technology to teach students using animation tools which help students to understand and grasp concepts by live visualisation techniques.


Remember that a good thesis statement should express a succinct debatable claim with supporting reasons that you can develop with evidence.


Here is an example of a debatable thesis statement that makes a strong claim: We desperately need an added-sugar tax in this country because taxing sugar will cut sales of unhealthy food and because the tax money we collect can pay to treat the diseases caused by added sugar.

Here is an example of a thesis statement related to internet censorship: Clearly, the internet must remain free because censorship kills free markets and threatens to destroy our democratic system.

Here is an example of a thesis statement related to animal rights: Every animal deserves rights because they feel and have intrinsic value.

Here is an example of a thesis statement related to abortion: Every woman should have access to safe abortions because women deserve control over their bodies and because not all women have the financial resources to bring a pregnancy to term.

Your score for this feature = 50/100
Paragraph 2 - first supporting argument: 52%

Topic sentence:
Although the above reasons prove to us that the uses of technology are immense, there is one major aspect about technology which stands to be a major disadvantage.

The first sentence of this paragraph has characteristics of a good topic sentence. That's good.

Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make one debatable claim that will catch your reader's attention and that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's not good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Cite sources:
You have not included an in-text citation, as far as I can tell. I was expecting to find a capitalized name (Walker) or year (2019) in parentheses in your first body paragraph. Scholars must use and cite information from reliable sources. Speak to your teacher or review the lesson in your textbook about how to cite sources within your paragraph. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100

Paragraph 3 - second supporting argument: 42%

Topic sentence:
It is every individual's duty to understand that technology is just a part of our lives which could enable a better living by automating mundane tasks thus reducing significant amount of time.

The first sentence of this second body paragraph has characteristics of a strong topic sentence. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's not good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Cite sources:
You have not included an in-text citation, as far as I can tell. I was expecting to find a capitalized name (Walker) or year (2019) in parentheses in your second body paragraph. Scholars must use and cite information from reliable sources. Speak to your teacher or review the lesson in your textbook about how to cite sources within your paragraph. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Vocabulary: 60%
Argument-related words: because, fact, hence, opinion, reasons, since, so, thus

Feedback: You have used many words related to argumentation. Your score for this feature = 100/100



Topic-related words: health, technology

Feedback: You have used 1 or 2 controversy-related words in your essay. That's a start. Your score for this feature = 20/100

Works Cited Section: 0%
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 10

Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100

Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...he treatments for example apps that now warn us incase of a higher heart rate or ext...

Feedback: You have a problem with your verb agreement. The pronoun "that" must be used with a third-person verb: "warns". (VA201)

Suggestion: warns

You wrote: ...ments for example apps that now warn us incase of a higher heart rate or extremely low he...

Feedback: Did you mean this? "in case of"?

Suggestion: in case of

You wrote: ...uding teachers in schools or professors in a college can use technology to teach s...

Feedback: The usual preposition for "college" is "at." Revise: "at a college".

Suggestion: at a college

You wrote: ...o understand and grasp concepts by live visualisation techniques. Although the above reasons ...

Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found

Suggestion: visualization, visualisations

You wrote: ...xample, a video streaming platform like youtube can have videos inappropriate for watch...

Feedback: Wait! Isn't "youtube" the name of a website? Capitalize it like this: "YouTube".

Suggestion: YouTube

You wrote: ...especially for children. Since there is less amount of limitations on watching video...

Feedback: Did you mean this? "fewer amounts"? The noun amount is countable.

Suggestion: fewer amounts

You wrote: ...ially for children. Since there is less amount of limitations on watching video conten...

Feedback: Something is missing here. You either need an article with "less amount" or a plural form.

Suggestion: a less amount, less amounts

You wrote: ...ducing significant amount of time. Hence , the pros and cons of technology would c...

Feedback: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma

Suggestion: ,

You wrote: ...pend on its usage. Thus, in my opinion, generalising the fact whether the technology today i...

Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found

Suggestion: generalizing

You wrote: ...sis while investigating whether life in moon is possible.

Feedback: The article is missing before the noun: "a moon", "the moon".
Suggestion: a moon, the moon