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Pls rate my AWA
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24 Apr 2024, 08:43
24 Apr 2024, 08:43
It is the artist not the critic who gives society something of lasting value.
Artists are the one persistently hard works for their product, while critics are those who just judge the work of the artist, not doing anything by themselves. So, the speaker holds the belief that it is the artist who brings something significant into the society rather than critics. If questioned I would completely support this viewpoint. The various reasons and examples to support my preposition have been further elaborated.
Firstly, it is the creative imagination of artist who brings new development into this world. Artist with their continuous determination try to change the world. The only of critics is just to remark their work. Only by judging you can’t bring change to the world. For instance, you want to alter some rules about your society. So, one has to get up and do something about it rather than just sitting and passing the comments about it.
Secondly, the work of critics suits only to them who aren’t intellectually productive, they don’t want to explore something new. According to me if you are being criticized then you are really making some progress, because your development will hurt their ego and all they will do is just criticize your work, although there will be many to support you. Consider this, at any point in our life we have claimed to someone that what they are doing will not intend any desired result. But at least they are trying and according to me hard work never goes in vain.
Lastly, I would like to pinpoint that I don’t completely disbelief in critics. As this critic’s many times help us to understand our mistake so that we can redress our work. Without this critic’s development will be ponderous. They help to develop our perceptive understanding. Take the examples of movies, critics review the movies and present their opinions, and this opinions helps the producer of movie to understand their mistake so that they don’t repeat it.
To summarize, I don’t completely disprove the work of critic’s but I just support that it is the artist due to which we can see significant development. Thus, I completely agree with the authors viewpoint.
Artists are the one persistently hard works for their product, while critics are those who just judge the work of the artist, not doing anything by themselves. So, the speaker holds the belief that it is the artist who brings something significant into the society rather than critics. If questioned I would completely support this viewpoint. The various reasons and examples to support my preposition have been further elaborated.
Firstly, it is the creative imagination of artist who brings new development into this world. Artist with their continuous determination try to change the world. The only of critics is just to remark their work. Only by judging you can’t bring change to the world. For instance, you want to alter some rules about your society. So, one has to get up and do something about it rather than just sitting and passing the comments about it.
Secondly, the work of critics suits only to them who aren’t intellectually productive, they don’t want to explore something new. According to me if you are being criticized then you are really making some progress, because your development will hurt their ego and all they will do is just criticize your work, although there will be many to support you. Consider this, at any point in our life we have claimed to someone that what they are doing will not intend any desired result. But at least they are trying and according to me hard work never goes in vain.
Lastly, I would like to pinpoint that I don’t completely disbelief in critics. As this critic’s many times help us to understand our mistake so that we can redress our work. Without this critic’s development will be ponderous. They help to develop our perceptive understanding. Take the examples of movies, critics review the movies and present their opinions, and this opinions helps the producer of movie to understand their mistake so that they don’t repeat it.
To summarize, I don’t completely disprove the work of critic’s but I just support that it is the artist due to which we can see significant development. Thus, I completely agree with the authors viewpoint.
Re: Pls rate my AWA
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24 Apr 2024, 08:47
24 Apr 2024, 08:47
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Assignment Score: 69.25
Statistics
1. You have written 357 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 21 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 17.00.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 9 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 53%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is quite dynamic. You write a variety of short sentences and long sentences. Increase the variance in your sentence length to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 61%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Artists are the one persistently hard works for their product, while critics are those who just judge the work of the artist, not doing anything by themselves.
I noticed that you started your essay with a surprising statistic to engage the reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The various reasons and examples to support my preposition have been further elaborated.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, it is the creative imagination of artist who brings new development into this world.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 80%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, the work of critics suits only to them who aren’t intellectually productive, they don’t want to explore something new.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have used a word commonly used when giving evidence. That's good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 45%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, I would like to pinpoint that I don’t completely disbelief in critics.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 33%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, I don’t completely disprove the work of critic’s but I just support that it is the artist due to which we can see significant development.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 14% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: because, belief, opinions, point, reasons, so, support, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 55% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: creative, significant, comment, instance, summarize, alter, author
Feedback: 7% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 70%
Number of errors: 6
Feedback: I detected a significant number of errors in your writing. Do your best to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 70/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...t into the society rather than critics. If questioned I would completely support t...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ty rather than critics. If questioned I would completely support this viewpoint. The various rea...
Feedback: Usually in a second conditional structure, we put a past tense verb in the if-clause, and would + infinitive in the result-clause. Here you have used "would" in the if-clause. Did you mean ""?
Suggestion:
You wrote: ... determination try to change the world. The only of critics is just to remark their work. O...
Feedback: The phrase "The only of" is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between "The" and "of".
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ey don’t want to explore something new. According to me if you are being criticized then you ar...
Feedback: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
Suggestion: In my opinion, I think
You wrote: ...es and present their opinions, and this opinions helps the producer of movie to understa...
Feedback: Use the singular form with "helps." Alternatively, conjugate your verb for a plural subject.
Suggestion: this opinion helps, this opinions help
You wrote: ...ment. Thus, I completely agree with the authors viewpoint.
Feedback: An apostrophe seems to be missing. Use the possessive form here: "authors' viewpoint" or when its only one author, "author's viewpoint"? (Ap03)
Suggestion: authors' viewpoint, author's viewpoint
Statistics
1. You have written 357 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 21 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 17.00.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 9 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 53%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is quite dynamic. You write a variety of short sentences and long sentences. Increase the variance in your sentence length to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 61%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Artists are the one persistently hard works for their product, while critics are those who just judge the work of the artist, not doing anything by themselves.
I noticed that you started your essay with a surprising statistic to engage the reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The various reasons and examples to support my preposition have been further elaborated.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, it is the creative imagination of artist who brings new development into this world.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 80%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, the work of critics suits only to them who aren’t intellectually productive, they don’t want to explore something new.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have used a word commonly used when giving evidence. That's good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 45%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, I would like to pinpoint that I don’t completely disbelief in critics.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 33%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, I don’t completely disprove the work of critic’s but I just support that it is the artist due to which we can see significant development.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 14% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: because, belief, opinions, point, reasons, so, support, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 55% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: creative, significant, comment, instance, summarize, alter, author
Feedback: 7% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 70%
Number of errors: 6
Feedback: I detected a significant number of errors in your writing. Do your best to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 70/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...t into the society rather than critics. If questioned I would completely support t...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ty rather than critics. If questioned I would completely support this viewpoint. The various rea...
Feedback: Usually in a second conditional structure, we put a past tense verb in the if-clause, and would + infinitive in the result-clause. Here you have used "would" in the if-clause. Did you mean ""?
Suggestion:
You wrote: ... determination try to change the world. The only of critics is just to remark their work. O...
Feedback: The phrase "The only of" is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between "The" and "of".
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ey don’t want to explore something new. According to me if you are being criticized then you ar...
Feedback: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
Suggestion: In my opinion, I think
You wrote: ...es and present their opinions, and this opinions helps the producer of movie to understa...
Feedback: Use the singular form with "helps." Alternatively, conjugate your verb for a plural subject.
Suggestion: this opinion helps, this opinions help
You wrote: ...ment. Thus, I completely agree with the authors viewpoint.
Feedback: An apostrophe seems to be missing. Use the possessive form here: "authors' viewpoint" or when its only one author, "author's viewpoint"? (Ap03)
Suggestion: authors' viewpoint, author's viewpoint
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