The essay is promising. However, it has a lot of grammar errors and needs to be fixed. Also should be longer than indeed it is

Assignment Score: 46.25
Writing quantity
1. You have written 440 words.

2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.

3. You have written 16 sentences.

4. You have written 0 question.

Essay structure and content: 55%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 52%

Opening:
In the memorandum, the chairperson of the West Egg Town Council concludes that due to the town’s strong commitment to recycling, the area that is available for landfill should last considerably longer than what was predicted earlier.

I was expecting to find a question mark at the end of the first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to start your essay with a question to engage your reader's attention. Try questions like these: Have you ever seen...? or Did you know that...? Your score for this feature = 0/100


I was unable to detect any errors in your first sentence. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. Your score for this feature = 0/100


You have chosen climate change as your topic, but your introduction only contains one climate-related word. Use more for a higher score. Here are some words I expected to encounter in a discussion on this topic: climate, fossil fuels, global warming, greenhouse gases, IPCC, PPM, CO2, GHGs. Your score for this feature = 60/100

Thesis:
However, the assertion might ultimately prove to be valid, the author needs to provide three supporting pieces of evidence in order to bolster the argument.


The last sentence of your introduction incorporates characteristics of a thesis statement that should have an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a succinct debatable claim with supporting reasons that you can develop with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Paragraph 2 - first supporting argument: 64%

Topic sentence:
First of all, the author needs to provide evidence of the basis of the prediction made by the consultants that the landfill would be completely filled within the next five years.

The first sentence of this paragraph has characteristics of a good topic sentence. That's good.

Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make one debatable claim that will catch your reader's attention and that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Evidence:
You have used a word commonly used when giving evidence. That's good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 60/100

Cite sources:
You have not included an in-text citation, as far as I can tell. I was expecting to find a capitalized name (Walker) or year (2019) in parentheses in your first body paragraph. Scholars must use and cite information from reliable sources. Speak to your teacher or review the lesson in your textbook about how to cite sources within your paragraph. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100

Paragraph 3 - second supporting argument: 40%

Topic sentence:
Second, the author makes an assumption that the recycled material should increase in the consecutive month as the charges for pickup of other households would have doubled.

The first sentence of this paragraph has some (but not all) of the characteristics of a strong topic sentence. You can improve this feature of your essay in the following ways:


Keep it short
Use a transition word: Second, To continue, Next, Furthermore, Moreover, etc.
Use your own words--don't quote. Use quotes later in the paragraph to support your claim.
Ensure that your topic sentence makes one succinct debatable claim that will catch your reader's attention and that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples.

Here are examples of topic sentences that make a strong claim:
We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing.
Secondly, internet censorship is bad for business.
Furthermore, animals deserve a life without cruelty, pain, isolation, and misery.
Next, abortion must remain a matter of personal choice for the woman.
Above all, society must guarantee women workplaces free from sexual harassment.

Your score for this feature = 60/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100

Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's not good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Cite sources:
You have not included an in-text citation, as far as I can tell. I was expecting to find a capitalized name (Walker) or year (2019) in parentheses in your second body paragraph. Scholars must use and cite information from reliable sources. Speak to your teacher or review the lesson in your textbook about how to cite sources within your paragraph. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100

Paragraph 4 - counterargument: 20%

Topic sentence:
Furthermore, the author needs to provide more evidence on whether the response recorded that the folks in the city would actually do more recycling in the future.

The first sentence of this paragraph has the characteristics of a counterargument. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Counter argue:
You have not introduced an opposing view using a commonly used phrase for reporting counterarguments. Improve your score by using a phrase from among these examples: some people claim, some people say, some believe, others believe, people object to, try to refute, discount, reject, it is often argued that, the opposing view, the opposing side. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Concede:
You have not used any phrases for conceding a point to opposing side. Being able to acknowledge and concede that there is apparent merit in the opposing view, you show your reader that you are fair-minded and reasonable. Here are some phrases you can use to concede: granted, it is true that, while it is true that, naturally, indeed, to be sure, admittedly, certainly, of course, one cannot deny that. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Refute:
You have not used any words or phrases to refute the opposing argument. You must mount an effect rebuttal. Here are some phrases you can use in your refutation of the counterargument: that being said, that said, however, nonetheless, nevertheless, on the contrary, on the other hand, regardless, whereas, although, and yet, in contrast, despite, countervailing evidence suggests. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Cite sources:
You have not included a citation. That's not good. It is important to indicate your sources. Speak to your teacher or review the lesson in your textbook about citing sources to improve your score. Your score for this feature = 0/100

Conclusion: 100%

Reformulation of the thesis:
In conclusion, the author needs to provide more, while it is possible that the landfill area would last considerably longer than was earlier predicted, as it stands now, rests on unfounded assumptions that hinder its persuasiveness.

Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 11% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100


The first sentence of your conclusion takes a strong stance. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like should.


You made a recommendation. That's good. It is a good practice in an essay of this type to recommend a course of action to your reader. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Prediction:
The paragraph contains prediction words like would.


I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. It seems you have. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100

Vocabulary: 60%
Argument-related words: argument, assertion, concludes, conclusion, evidence, supporting, thus, true

Feedback: You have used many words related to argumentation. Your score for this feature = 100/100



Topic-related words: evidence, residents

Feedback: You have used 1 or 2 controversy-related words in your essay. That's a start. Your score for this feature = 20/100

Works Cited Section: 0%
Language Accuracy: 70%
Number of errors: 6

Feedback: I detected a significant number of errors in your writing. Do your best to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 70/100

Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...However, the assertion might ultimately prove to be valid, the author needs to provid...

Feedback: Make sure that your verb is conjugated for your third person singular subject "the assertion might". Revise: "the assertion might ultimately proves".(va05)

Suggestion: the assertion might ultimately proves

You wrote: ...ctivities. If any of the above examples hold true, the author’s assertion lacks meri...

Feedback: You have a problem with your verb agreement. You have used a singular subject "any of the above examples" with a plural verb. Did you mean "any of the above examples holds"?

Suggestion: any of the above examples holds

You wrote: ...in the consecutive month as the charges for pickup of other households would have d...

Feedback: The usual collocation for "charges" is "with" not "for". Did you mean "charges with"?

Suggestion: charges with

You wrote: ...ermore, machines required for recycling perhaps are more expensive and there could only...

Feedback: When you want to speak about perhapses in general, use a plural. "recycling perhapses". For a specific "perhaps," use the definite article like this, "recycling the perhaps". You can use the singular form to express the idea of "recycling any perhaps," but you will need an indefinite article, "recycling a perhaps".

Suggestion: recycling perhapses, recycling the perhaps, recycling a perhaps

You wrote: ...that takes almost 10 hours to process 5 kgs worth of plastics. If any of the above ...

Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found

Suggestion: kg, KGB, KBS, AGS, CGS, KGO, kegs, KSS, LGS, BGS, DGS, GGS, IGS, KDS, KES, KG, KGM, KHS, KKS, KMS, KOS, KS, KTS, Ks, MGS, NGS, PGS, RGS, SGS, TGS, UGS, VGS, WGS, gs, ks, k gs, kg s, EKGs, Kas

You wrote: ... plastics. If any of the above examples prove to be true, then the argument does not ...

Feedback: You have a problem with your verb agreement. You have used a singular subject "any of the above examples" with a plural verb. Did you mean "any of the above examples proves"?

Suggestion: any of the above examples proves

Hi Carcass, can you please review my issue & argument essay, please.

The following appeared in a memorandum written by the chairperson of the West Egg Town Council.
"Two years ago, consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, the town's residents have been recycling twice as much material as they did in previous years. Next month the amount of recycled material — which includes paper, plastic, and metal — should further increase, since charges for pickup of other household garbage will double. Furthermore, over 90 percent of the respondents to a recent survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our town's strong commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer than predicted."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the memorandum, the chairperson of the West Egg Town Council concludes that due to the town’s strong commitment to recycling, the area that is available for landfill should last considerably longer than what was predicted earlier. The author comes to this conclusion based on the town’s residents who have been recycling more than expected. However, the assertion might ultimately prove to be valid, the author needs to provide three supporting pieces of evidence in order to bolster the argument.

First of all, the author needs to provide evidence of the basis of the prediction made by the consultants that the landfill would be completely filled within the next five years. For example, there could be a major shift in population from the town to a different city for education or work opportunities that might potentially lead to a decline in population which in turn reduces the garbage disposal in West Egg’s landfill. In addition, folks in the town could perhaps over the years are educated more on environmentally conscious decisions and take careful decisions, like stop using plastics and use more eco-friendly items for their day-to-day activities. If any of the above examples hold true, the author’s assertion lacks merit.

Second, the author makes an assumption that the recycled material should increase in the consecutive month as the charges for pickup of other households would have doubled. For instance, the materials collected from households could have doubled over the month, but due to machine faultiness or lack of resources to run machines in the factory that recycles plastics, the materials might not have been recycled as per the prediction. Furthermore, machines required for recycling perhaps are more expensive and there could only be one machine in the town that takes almost 10 hours to process 5 kgs worth of plastics. If any of the above examples prove to be true, then the argument does not hold water.

Furthermore, the author needs to provide more evidence on whether the response recorded that the folks in the city would actually do more recycling in the future. For example, the data collected could be skewed, where the survey collected was from a group of folks who are more inclined towards recycling and saving the environment. If the above example prove to be valid, then the author lacks merit.

In conclusion, the author needs to provide more, while it is possible that the landfill area would last considerably longer than was earlier predicted, as it stands now, rests on unfounded assumptions that hinder its persuasiveness. Thus, the author should provide the three pieces of evidence discussed above in order to enhance its credibility.

Issue essay

Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.

Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.


A society is a culmination of demographics that co-exists under a common territory - each one has its own specific characteristics. Each demographics is influenced by historical events, traditions, and culture, and the extent to which society gets influenced varies tremendously. The prompt argues that the best way to understand a society’s character is by analyzing the nation’s character of heroes and role models. I mostly disagree with this stance for the following two reasons, though I do concede that this claim might lead to reflecting the highest ideals of a society through its role models more accurately.

First, a societal function is dependent on various factors, such as its people, culture, food, education, politics, and a myriad of factors. Take country India for example, my nation has more than 13 states and 2 union territories, is a culture-rich nation, where each and every state follows its own tradition, has its own language to converse, different political influences and the list goes on. Therefore, in order to study a nation's character, one has to consider different dimensions to evaluate a society’s character.

Second, influencers mask their true character in movies by showcasing traits that are not so true and unreal from their real lives. In addition, 62% of youngsters in India consider television actors and actresses as their role models just by fantasizing about the character role that they played in that particular movie. However, in real life, the celebrity might have the opposite characteristics than that they portray in films, hence creating a false impression for the people who look up to them.

However, I do concede that models can represent a society’s nature as the rest of the nation look up to them and try to emulate traits that attracted them the most. According to the Indian Statistics of Business school from 2020, 45% of male children less than 10 years of age, worship “Mahendra Singh Dhoni”, a former Indian Cricket team’s Captain. Dhoni is called “Captain cool” for a reason, as he handles any pressing situations with a cool head.

In conclusion, the best way to understand a society’s ideals and beliefs, rather than having a single-layer evaluation mechanism, one has to dig deep into the society’s culture, values, politics, laws, and a myriad of other contributing factors.

Hi @carass, please review my Issue essay

Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one's ability to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.


A person develops his or her interpersonal skills by getting out of his or her comfort zone and by interacting with people irrespective of people’s race, religion, or culture. By doing this, one can explore and be more empathetic toward various religions and cultures that people uphold. The author provides two claims some people believe that traveling and exploring places could enhance one’s ability to connect, which in turn helps in molding their communication skills, whereas the other set of people believes that living in the same place develops a deeper understanding of that community. I mostly agree that traveling can indeed, bring out myriad perspectives of how one perceives their life, and helps in exploring your true self better for the following two reasons. Though, I do concede that living in the same city could strongly develop a greater sense of connecting to your roots.

First of all, traveling can unravel multifaceted opportunities that one shouldn’t miss in their lifetime. It not only helps in truly understanding your likes and dislikes of who you would like to be surrounded with but also teaches you to communicate effectively with different types of people. For instance, people from different nations have an idiosyncratic lifestyle that they follow, a unique style of education, and awareness of different socio-economic topics to a greater extent. When you discuss these topics with the local people in a different location, there could perhaps be an opportunity for exchanging your knowledge. In addition, you can understand better your true self, what you abhor the most in your current lifestyle, and what you like the most and bring changes accordingly. The above examples illustrate that traveling gives you a huge perk of exploring yourself that one shouldn’t miss.

In addition, traveling lets you explore beautiful hidden places and learn more about their culture, that you wouldn’t otherwise. For example, if you visit the Taj Mahal, which is considered to be one of the “Seven wonders of the world”, you would perhaps understand why Shah Jahan, the former emperor who built a masterpiece for his beloved wife as a token of love after her passing. This helps you understand which cultures value what the most. The above-mentioned example helps us understand how traveling can help you know the history of places better.

However, I do concede that constantly traveling to different places can indeed, tire you out and could lead to developing fatigues. Whereas, living in the same city for a longer period, helps one understand their culture and traditions, and connect to them at a deeper level. It’s true that it takes a few months to almost a year to build good relationships with the people around you, hence constantly traveling could bring out a sense of disconnection and a feeling that one belongs nowhere. In addition, living in the same locality, one can get to know their neighbors and friends better since you hang out with them constantly, and you develop a strong bond that could last for a lifetime.

In conclusion, staying in the same locality does have its own perks such as it helps one to truly understand their local traditions and know their people better, however, traveling across the globe does provide vast opportunities in terms of enhancing one’s personal development, communication skills, and of course in being more empathetic to one another.