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can anyone grade my gre issue essay from power prep 2
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Updated on: 11 May 2022, 09:26
Updated on: 11 May 2022, 09:26
Issue essay:
My response:
Every person has to go through the process of development in his life. This development stage impacts the overall nature of the person. This process of development in one way or another impacts how a person's behaviour. The sence of leadership often comes with the sense of superioriety which comes with having sense of competition. Along with a that, there should also be a certain amount of cooperation in a leader. If a person seams to be chuvinistic, then his co-worker and subbordinate will surely resist him, they will not obey his order, if they do that will not e willingly or happly. There will be the imitaton of dictatorship in his leadership. so for the following reason i mostly disagree with the issue presented and for that i will present the following reasons.
Firstly, if a person is only embeded with cooperating qualities, he may not be a perfect leader. A good leader is who knows when to cooperate, when to work hand-in-hand with his collegues, and when to order them for a certain job which is to be done. a leader needes to be fierce as well as beguile. He should have the sense of control over his emotions. Such qualities cannot just be developed with the learning of qualities sach as coopration and coordination.
Competiton not only means that one have to win just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him since the time of his development he want to win all the things that he is participating in. The leader should know when to stand up for himself, when to take harsh decisions, when and where should one rule and cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any government leader. He have to know when to take the tough decision for the betterment of the society. Such leader has to also need to prove that he has a authoritirian responsibility among his peers. This shrutness comes with the sense of competition.
The excellent example for both the scenario is of a CEO of a big cooperation. He has to have sense of competitiveness to stay in his business. He has to be attentative to what other companies are doing, is there any other player cooming in the market, is there better development of my product by his competitiors, etc. bu the role of such ceo is to not only see outside of his company, but to also also se within his own comapny. To manage, motivate his workforce he has to have sense of copperation.
Thus for the betterment, and the increqase of the organization profit or impact on the world a good leader is very important. such leader has all the qualities he need at his disposal. He should know when to use them. The person has to have such balance of personality . If such balance is absent he certainly cannot be a good leader.
Quote:
The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
My response:
Every person has to go through the process of development in his life. This development stage impacts the overall nature of the person. This process of development in one way or another impacts how a person's behaviour. The sence of leadership often comes with the sense of superioriety which comes with having sense of competition. Along with a that, there should also be a certain amount of cooperation in a leader. If a person seams to be chuvinistic, then his co-worker and subbordinate will surely resist him, they will not obey his order, if they do that will not e willingly or happly. There will be the imitaton of dictatorship in his leadership. so for the following reason i mostly disagree with the issue presented and for that i will present the following reasons.
Firstly, if a person is only embeded with cooperating qualities, he may not be a perfect leader. A good leader is who knows when to cooperate, when to work hand-in-hand with his collegues, and when to order them for a certain job which is to be done. a leader needes to be fierce as well as beguile. He should have the sense of control over his emotions. Such qualities cannot just be developed with the learning of qualities sach as coopration and coordination.
Competiton not only means that one have to win just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him since the time of his development he want to win all the things that he is participating in. The leader should know when to stand up for himself, when to take harsh decisions, when and where should one rule and cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any government leader. He have to know when to take the tough decision for the betterment of the society. Such leader has to also need to prove that he has a authoritirian responsibility among his peers. This shrutness comes with the sense of competition.
The excellent example for both the scenario is of a CEO of a big cooperation. He has to have sense of competitiveness to stay in his business. He has to be attentative to what other companies are doing, is there any other player cooming in the market, is there better development of my product by his competitiors, etc. bu the role of such ceo is to not only see outside of his company, but to also also se within his own comapny. To manage, motivate his workforce he has to have sense of copperation.
Thus for the betterment, and the increqase of the organization profit or impact on the world a good leader is very important. such leader has all the qualities he need at his disposal. He should know when to use them. The person has to have such balance of personality . If such balance is absent he certainly cannot be a good leader.
Re: can anyone grade my gre issue essay from power prep 2
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11 May 2022, 09:10
11 May 2022, 09:10
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Hi Sahil,
Please add the question stem so that a proper evaluation can be done.
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Please add the question stem so that a proper evaluation can be done.
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Re: can anyone grade my gre issue essay from power prep 2
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11 May 2022, 10:14
11 May 2022, 10:14
Expert Reply
Sorry but not a good essay
Quote:
Opinion Essay
Assignment Score: 49.25
Statistics
1. You have written 489 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 29 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 16.86.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 3 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 26%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 43%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 66%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Every person has to go through the process of development in his life.
I was expecting to find a question, a quote, a statistic, or an anecdote in your first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to use either a question, a quote, or a statistic to engage your readers attention at the beginning of your essay. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
so for the following reason i mostly disagree with the issue presented and for that i will present the following reasons.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, if a person is only embeded with cooperating qualities, he may not be a perfect leader.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Competiton not only means that one have to win just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him since the time of his development he want to win all the things that he is participating in.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
The excellent example for both the scenario is of a CEO of a big cooperation.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 66%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Thus for the betterment, and the increqase of the organization profit or impact on the world a good leader is very important.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 4% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like should, has to
You made a recommendation. That's good. It is a good practice in an essay of this type to recommend a course of action to your reader. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: reason, reasons, since, so, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 61% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: issue, process, role, impact, participate, coordination, job, overall, cooperate, cooperation, motivate, disposal, scenario
Feedback: 13% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 42
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...is process of development in one way or another impacts how a person's behaviour. The s...
Feedback: You have used the singular "another" with a plural noun. Revise: "other impacts".
Suggestion: other impacts
You wrote: ...r impacts how a person's behaviour. The sence of leadership often comes with the sens...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: since, hence, sense, fence, pence, Spence, seance, Señé
You wrote: ...eadership often comes with the sense of superioriety which comes with having sense of compet...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: superiority
You wrote: ...on in a leader. If a person seams to be chuvinistic, then his co-worker and subbordinate wi...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: chauvinistic
You wrote: ... be chuvinistic, then his co-worker and subbordinate will surely resist him, they will not o...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: subordinate
You wrote: ...if they do that will not e willingly or happly. There will be the imitaton of dictator...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: apply, happy, happily, haply, h apply, hap ply
You wrote: ... willingly or happly. There will be the imitaton of dictatorship in his leadership. so f...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: imitation, imitator
You wrote: ...aton of dictatorship in his leadership. so for the following reason i mostly disag...
Feedback: Put a comma after the introductory adverb phrase "So".
Suggestion: So
You wrote: ...leadership. so for the following reason i mostly disagree with the issue presente...
Feedback: This should be written in uppercase.
Suggestion: I
You wrote: ...e with the issue presented and for that i will present the following reasons. Fir...
Feedback: This should be written in uppercase.
Suggestion: I
You wrote: ...g reasons. Firstly, if a person is only embeded with cooperating qualities, he may not ...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "embedded", the past tense form of the verb 'embed'?
Suggestion: embedded, embed ed
You wrote: ...ate, when to work hand-in-hand with his collegues, and when to order them for a certain j...
Feedback: You have a spelling error. You wrote "collegues". Next time do not forget the "a" in "colleagues".
Suggestion: colleagues
You wrote: ... for a certain job which is to be done. a leader needes to be fierce as well as b...
Feedback: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
You wrote: ...rtain job which is to be done. a leader needes to be fierce as well as beguile. He sho...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "needs", the plural form of the noun 'need'?
Suggestion: needs, needed, needles, need es
You wrote: ...eveloped with the learning of qualities sach as coopration and coordination. Competi...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: such, each, sack, Bach, sac, Mach, Sachs, sacs, sash, SACD, ACH, mach, sch, SAC, SAH, sac h, Sacha
You wrote: ... with the learning of qualities sach as coopration and coordination. Competiton not only m...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: cooperation, coop ration
You wrote: ...es sach as coopration and coordination. Competiton not only means that one have to win jus...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Competition, Competitor
You wrote: ... one have to win just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him...
Feedback: You have a problem with your verb agreement. The singular noun phrase "a person" must be used with a third-person verb "has" or a past tense verb "had". (VBE)
Suggestion: has, had
You wrote: ...in just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him since the time of his d...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: competitiveness
You wrote: ...im since the time of his development he want to win all the things that he is partic...
Feedback: The pronoun "he" is usually used with a third-person singular verb form "wants" or a past tense verb form "wanted".
Suggestion: wants, wanted
You wrote: ...ons, when and where should one rule and cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema f...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: cooperate, coo prate, coop rate
You wrote: ... should one rule and cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any governme...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: example
You wrote: ...cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any government leader. He have to...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: dilemma
You wrote: ... simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any government leader. He have to know ...
Feedback: Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
You wrote: ... dilema for a any government leader. He have to know when to take the tough decision...
Feedback: The pronoun "He" is usually used with a third-person singular verb form "has" or a past tense verb form "had".
Suggestion: has, had
You wrote: ...for the betterment of the society. Such leader has to also need to prove that he has a...
Feedback: An article is missing before the noun: "such a leader". (art025)
Suggestion: such a leader
You wrote: ...r has to also need to prove that he has a authoritirian responsibility among his ...
Feedback: Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
You wrote: ...has to also need to prove that he has a authoritirian responsibility among his peers. This sh...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: authoritarian
You wrote: ...an responsibility among his peers. This shrutness comes with the sense of competition. Th...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shortness, stoutness
You wrote: ...s to stay in his business. He has to be attentative to what other companies are doing, is t...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: at tentative
You wrote: ...es are doing, is there any other player cooming in the market, is there better developm...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: coming, cooking, cooling, booming, looming, rooming, zooming, cooing, dooming, cooping, coaming
You wrote: ...better development of my product by his competitiors, etc. bu the role of such ceo is to not...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: competitions, competitors
You wrote: ... competitiors, etc. bu the role of such ceo is to not only see outside of his compa...
Feedback: An article is missing before the noun: "such a ceo". (art025)
Suggestion: such a ceo
You wrote: ...utside of his company, but to also also se within his own comapny. To manage, moti...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: SE, Se, he, we, be, me, she, set, so, use, see, St, sea, SD, SF, SG, SK, SL, sue, Sue, sec, SOE, SSE, UE, seq, sh, st, DSE, HSE, OE, PSE, SME, Sec, sew, sf, ESE, AE, ASE, BSE, Be, CE, CSE, Ce, DE, E, EE, Fe, GE, Ge, He, IE, JE, KE, LE, LSE, Le, ME, MSE, Me, NE, Ne, PE, QSE, RE, RSE, Re, S, SA, SAE, SB, SC, SEA, SEB, SEC, SEF, SEG, SEJ, SEK, SEL, SEM, SEO, SEP, SER, SES, SET, SEU, SEV, SEX, SEY, SEZ, SFE, SGE, SH, SI, SJ, SM, SN, SNE, SO, SP, SPE, SRE, SS, ST, STE, SU, SVE, SW, SWE, SY, SZ, Sb, Sc, Sen, Sep, Set, Si, Sm, Sn, Sp, Sq, Sr, Ste, TSE, Te, USE, VE, Xe, ZSE, e, es, ne, re, s, sen, sex, sq, ve, ye, s e, SQ, Sa, Su, Ze
You wrote: ...any, but to also also se within his own comapny. To manage, motivate his workforce he h...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: company
You wrote: ...e his workforce he has to have sense of copperation. Thus for the betterment, and the incre...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: cooperation
You wrote: ...ce he has to have sense of copperation. Thus for the betterment, and the increqase o...
Feedback: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
You wrote: ...ation. Thus for the betterment, and the increqase of the organization profit or impact on...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: increase
You wrote: ... world a good leader is very important. such leader has all the qualities he need at...
Feedback: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Such
You wrote: ...d a good leader is very important. such leader has all the qualities he need at his di...
Feedback: An article is missing before the noun: "such a leader". (art025)
Suggestion: such a leader
You wrote: ... has to have such balance of personality . If such balance is absent he certainly ...
Feedback: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
You wrote: ...s to have such balance of personality . If such balance is absent he certainly can...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Assignment Score: 49.25
Statistics
1. You have written 489 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 29 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 16.86.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 3 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 26%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 43%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 66%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Every person has to go through the process of development in his life.
I was expecting to find a question, a quote, a statistic, or an anecdote in your first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to use either a question, a quote, or a statistic to engage your readers attention at the beginning of your essay. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
so for the following reason i mostly disagree with the issue presented and for that i will present the following reasons.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, if a person is only embeded with cooperating qualities, he may not be a perfect leader.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Competiton not only means that one have to win just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him since the time of his development he want to win all the things that he is participating in.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
The excellent example for both the scenario is of a CEO of a big cooperation.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 66%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Thus for the betterment, and the increqase of the organization profit or impact on the world a good leader is very important.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 4% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like should, has to
You made a recommendation. That's good. It is a good practice in an essay of this type to recommend a course of action to your reader. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: reason, reasons, since, so, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 61% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: issue, process, role, impact, participate, coordination, job, overall, cooperate, cooperation, motivate, disposal, scenario
Feedback: 13% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 42
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...is process of development in one way or another impacts how a person's behaviour. The s...
Feedback: You have used the singular "another" with a plural noun. Revise: "other impacts".
Suggestion: other impacts
You wrote: ...r impacts how a person's behaviour. The sence of leadership often comes with the sens...
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Suggestion: since, hence, sense, fence, pence, Spence, seance, Señé
You wrote: ...eadership often comes with the sense of superioriety which comes with having sense of compet...
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Suggestion: superiority
You wrote: ...on in a leader. If a person seams to be chuvinistic, then his co-worker and subbordinate wi...
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Suggestion: chauvinistic
You wrote: ... be chuvinistic, then his co-worker and subbordinate will surely resist him, they will not o...
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Suggestion: subordinate
You wrote: ...if they do that will not e willingly or happly. There will be the imitaton of dictator...
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Suggestion: apply, happy, happily, haply, h apply, hap ply
You wrote: ... willingly or happly. There will be the imitaton of dictatorship in his leadership. so f...
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Suggestion: imitation, imitator
You wrote: ...aton of dictatorship in his leadership. so for the following reason i mostly disag...
Feedback: Put a comma after the introductory adverb phrase "So".
Suggestion: So
You wrote: ...leadership. so for the following reason i mostly disagree with the issue presente...
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Suggestion: I
You wrote: ...e with the issue presented and for that i will present the following reasons. Fir...
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Suggestion: I
You wrote: ...g reasons. Firstly, if a person is only embeded with cooperating qualities, he may not ...
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Suggestion: embedded, embed ed
You wrote: ...ate, when to work hand-in-hand with his collegues, and when to order them for a certain j...
Feedback: You have a spelling error. You wrote "collegues". Next time do not forget the "a" in "colleagues".
Suggestion: colleagues
You wrote: ... for a certain job which is to be done. a leader needes to be fierce as well as b...
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Suggestion: A
You wrote: ...rtain job which is to be done. a leader needes to be fierce as well as beguile. He sho...
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Suggestion: needs, needed, needles, need es
You wrote: ...eveloped with the learning of qualities sach as coopration and coordination. Competi...
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Suggestion: such, each, sack, Bach, sac, Mach, Sachs, sacs, sash, SACD, ACH, mach, sch, SAC, SAH, sac h, Sacha
You wrote: ... with the learning of qualities sach as coopration and coordination. Competiton not only m...
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Suggestion: cooperation, coop ration
You wrote: ...es sach as coopration and coordination. Competiton not only means that one have to win jus...
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Suggestion: Competition, Competitor
You wrote: ... one have to win just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him...
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Suggestion: has, had
You wrote: ...in just once, if a person have sense of competitivness embedded in him since the time of his d...
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Suggestion: competitiveness
You wrote: ...im since the time of his development he want to win all the things that he is partic...
Feedback: The pronoun "he" is usually used with a third-person singular verb form "wants" or a past tense verb form "wanted".
Suggestion: wants, wanted
You wrote: ...ons, when and where should one rule and cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema f...
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Suggestion: cooperate, coo prate, coop rate
You wrote: ... should one rule and cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any governme...
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Suggestion: example
You wrote: ...cooprate. A simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any government leader. He have to...
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Suggestion: dilemma
You wrote: ... simple exampe for this is a dilema for a any government leader. He have to know ...
Feedback: Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
You wrote: ... dilema for a any government leader. He have to know when to take the tough decision...
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Suggestion: has, had
You wrote: ...for the betterment of the society. Such leader has to also need to prove that he has a...
Feedback: An article is missing before the noun: "such a leader". (art025)
Suggestion: such a leader
You wrote: ...r has to also need to prove that he has a authoritirian responsibility among his ...
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Suggestion: an
You wrote: ...has to also need to prove that he has a authoritirian responsibility among his peers. This sh...
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Suggestion: authoritarian
You wrote: ...an responsibility among his peers. This shrutness comes with the sense of competition. Th...
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Suggestion: shortness, stoutness
You wrote: ...s to stay in his business. He has to be attentative to what other companies are doing, is t...
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Suggestion: at tentative
You wrote: ...es are doing, is there any other player cooming in the market, is there better developm...
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Suggestion: coming, cooking, cooling, booming, looming, rooming, zooming, cooing, dooming, cooping, coaming
You wrote: ...better development of my product by his competitiors, etc. bu the role of such ceo is to not...
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Suggestion: competitions, competitors
You wrote: ... competitiors, etc. bu the role of such ceo is to not only see outside of his compa...
Feedback: An article is missing before the noun: "such a ceo". (art025)
Suggestion: such a ceo
You wrote: ...utside of his company, but to also also se within his own comapny. To manage, moti...
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Suggestion: SE, Se, he, we, be, me, she, set, so, use, see, St, sea, SD, SF, SG, SK, SL, sue, Sue, sec, SOE, SSE, UE, seq, sh, st, DSE, HSE, OE, PSE, SME, Sec, sew, sf, ESE, AE, ASE, BSE, Be, CE, CSE, Ce, DE, E, EE, Fe, GE, Ge, He, IE, JE, KE, LE, LSE, Le, ME, MSE, Me, NE, Ne, PE, QSE, RE, RSE, Re, S, SA, SAE, SB, SC, SEA, SEB, SEC, SEF, SEG, SEJ, SEK, SEL, SEM, SEO, SEP, SER, SES, SET, SEU, SEV, SEX, SEY, SEZ, SFE, SGE, SH, SI, SJ, SM, SN, SNE, SO, SP, SPE, SRE, SS, ST, STE, SU, SVE, SW, SWE, SY, SZ, Sb, Sc, Sen, Sep, Set, Si, Sm, Sn, Sp, Sq, Sr, Ste, TSE, Te, USE, VE, Xe, ZSE, e, es, ne, re, s, sen, sex, sq, ve, ye, s e, SQ, Sa, Su, Ze
You wrote: ...any, but to also also se within his own comapny. To manage, motivate his workforce he h...
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Suggestion: company
You wrote: ...e his workforce he has to have sense of copperation. Thus for the betterment, and the incre...
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Suggestion: cooperation
You wrote: ...ce he has to have sense of copperation. Thus for the betterment, and the increqase o...
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Suggestion: Thus,
You wrote: ...ation. Thus for the betterment, and the increqase of the organization profit or impact on...
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Suggestion: increase
You wrote: ... world a good leader is very important. such leader has all the qualities he need at...
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Suggestion: Such
You wrote: ...d a good leader is very important. such leader has all the qualities he need at his di...
Feedback: An article is missing before the noun: "such a leader". (art025)
Suggestion: such a leader
You wrote: ... has to have such balance of personality . If such balance is absent he certainly ...
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Suggestion: .
You wrote: ...s to have such balance of personality . If such balance is absent he certainly can...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
