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Please, help me to improve on writing Issue Argument
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08 Aug 2022, 14:54
08 Aug 2022, 14:54
The claim that standardized curriculum should be instituted for all students before they enter college is a compelling one. The reason is that colleges can use the same criteria to assess students competency before they apply for different programs in the college. However, Standardized curriculum is not tailored to students strengths and weaknesses as opposed to customized curriculum. Therefore, grades achieved according to standardized curriculum test may not be reppresentative of students skills and potential to perform well in the college. Therefore, I cannot completely agree that all students should be required to study the same national curriculum before they enter college.
First of all, the same national curriculum provides limited opportunity for students to determine their interests in the specific area where they want to persue their careers. As a result, students end up being bewildered what subjects they want to study in the college, and what career they want to persue upon graduation. In addition, since the same national curriculum includes courses from a variety of disciplines, students may not develop all the required skills and qualifications in the area they plan to specialize in college.
Secondly, not all the students will find it necessary to enter college upon graduation from high school. To illustrate, it is quite common in North America for students to take time off and travel around the world to explore their interests, and determine how they want to structure their lives, and develop their careers in the next 10 years. Some students may find their passion in art, assuming artistic and creative roles, such as make up artists, hairdresser, etc. Thus, the same national curriculum will hinder an opportunity for students to develop their skills in artistic roles.
There is, however, one modification that makes the claim more complete. The same national curriculum may not be instituted around the world since countries across the globe has different access to resources. For example, Africa may not have the same access to resources as Germany to establish the same national curriculum. While, being forced to defend an idea against opposition marks a good argument, it is not always ultimate test.
First of all, the same national curriculum provides limited opportunity for students to determine their interests in the specific area where they want to persue their careers. As a result, students end up being bewildered what subjects they want to study in the college, and what career they want to persue upon graduation. In addition, since the same national curriculum includes courses from a variety of disciplines, students may not develop all the required skills and qualifications in the area they plan to specialize in college.
Secondly, not all the students will find it necessary to enter college upon graduation from high school. To illustrate, it is quite common in North America for students to take time off and travel around the world to explore their interests, and determine how they want to structure their lives, and develop their careers in the next 10 years. Some students may find their passion in art, assuming artistic and creative roles, such as make up artists, hairdresser, etc. Thus, the same national curriculum will hinder an opportunity for students to develop their skills in artistic roles.
There is, however, one modification that makes the claim more complete. The same national curriculum may not be instituted around the world since countries across the globe has different access to resources. For example, Africa may not have the same access to resources as Germany to establish the same national curriculum. While, being forced to defend an idea against opposition marks a good argument, it is not always ultimate test.
Re: Please, help me to improve on writing Issue Argument
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09 Aug 2022, 19:38
09 Aug 2022, 19:38
Structure of the Essay
In the first paragraph you have explained one problem with a standardised curriculum. It would have been better to move this explanation to another paragraph.
Let the first paragraph be just an introduction. Introduce the issue and state your position.
Let the reasons and examples to support your position be in subsequent body paragraphs. Each body paragraph should be about one clear point: either one reason why you think a standardised curriculum is a bad idea, preferably with an example, or perhaps an example that illustrates a problem with standardised curriculums.
Think of two or three reasons and/or examples before you start wtiting.
End the essay with a conclusion paragraph in which you restate your position and summarise your reasons.
Content of the Essay
You have talked about how a standardised curriculum will not be tailored to strengths and weaknesses of individual students and grades may not reflect student abilities. These are good, valid points, and you could have expanded on these points in body paragraphs.
Your point that 'the same national curriculum provides limited opportunity for students to determine their interests in the specific area where they want to persue their careers' is also a good one.
But I'm finding it difficult to understand some of your other points and how they are relevant. For example, you start the second paragraph by saying that some students may not go to college immediately and may decide to travel instead. That is not really related to the issue of a standardised curriculum. Whether or not students go to college immediately, the advantages and disadvantages of a standardised curriculum stay the same.
In the last paragraph (which is not very clear) you seem to be talking about standardising curriculums around the world! Most people will assume that any talk of standardised curriculum is for within a country.
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In the first paragraph you have explained one problem with a standardised curriculum. It would have been better to move this explanation to another paragraph.
Let the first paragraph be just an introduction. Introduce the issue and state your position.
Let the reasons and examples to support your position be in subsequent body paragraphs. Each body paragraph should be about one clear point: either one reason why you think a standardised curriculum is a bad idea, preferably with an example, or perhaps an example that illustrates a problem with standardised curriculums.
Think of two or three reasons and/or examples before you start wtiting.
End the essay with a conclusion paragraph in which you restate your position and summarise your reasons.
Content of the Essay
You have talked about how a standardised curriculum will not be tailored to strengths and weaknesses of individual students and grades may not reflect student abilities. These are good, valid points, and you could have expanded on these points in body paragraphs.
Your point that 'the same national curriculum provides limited opportunity for students to determine their interests in the specific area where they want to persue their careers' is also a good one.
But I'm finding it difficult to understand some of your other points and how they are relevant. For example, you start the second paragraph by saying that some students may not go to college immediately and may decide to travel instead. That is not really related to the issue of a standardised curriculum. Whether or not students go to college immediately, the advantages and disadvantages of a standardised curriculum stay the same.
In the last paragraph (which is not very clear) you seem to be talking about standardising curriculums around the world! Most people will assume that any talk of standardised curriculum is for within a country.
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