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Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The last decades have profoundly changed the way our society works and, particularly, our opinions on higher education and school in general. As a consequence of the plummeting of jobs demands and the requirement for better trained professionals, that followed the 2008 global financial crisis, people are now investing much more on their university studies and, although this is improving the number of well-taught individuals entering the market, it also brought to a new potential crisis of college leavings and forfeiting. Looking for the dream of a stable and well-paid position pushes, indeed, many applicants to enter educational fields that are not suited for their skills or character, ending up wasting money and time since they are not able to complete their studies.
To face this growing problem, I agree high schools and varsities shall take a high dose of responsibility to effectively evaluate all their students, understanding which may be their appropriate fields of study and, consequently, discouraging them for pursuing those that are not well suited for them. Such a process, moreover, would eventually reduce the number of applications to the most famous programs and the most renown institutions, limiting the time required for evaluating applicants and hence, favoring the most valid candidates.
However, even though this philosophy of action might, as discussed above, produce long-term positive effects, I am not completely sure professors would always make the right decision in discouraging someone from following a certain path. In other words, I question the effectiveness of a method these schools could adopt to understand who is good enough for a certain program and who is not. In fact, I believe schools would leave this high responsibility to those educators who spend more time with students. Although, in many cases a person who teach and evaluate is capable of understanding the skills of a young adult, I also know as a matter of fact, that many students do not actually work as hard as they can in school. Whether this issue is related to a lack of interests in the subjects studied or to other momentary concerns of these students lives is not relevant to this argument. What is important and must be taken into consideration, is that suggesting someone with an hidden talent to not pursue a career path because of a not objective conclusion based on limited observations, would probably damage his/her life rather than help him/her.
To sum up, I approve a well-thought intervention of educational institutions aiming at directing students to their most appropriate studying program but I understand such approach ought not to be deemed as universal, in order to prevent valuable and talented people from leaving a career path which, even though not appropriate in the eyes of a teacher, might end up becoming their road.