The newspaper article from Altamonte High School asserts that removing physical education classes and investing more resources into the development of its school and varsity sports teams. However, the writer does not provide enough conclusive evidence to support the scope of the argument. Therefore, the argument made by the writer is flawed and unconvincing.
The writer states that being a member of a sports team promotes a healthy lifestyle, but the argument is not supported by enough claims to make the argument accurate. For example, certain sports activities involve not investing enough physicality in conducting the sport. Additionally, improving the body’s healthy lifestyle does not only come by physicality it also comes through other factors such as having a wholesome diet. The writer did not focus on how being on a sports team can help in enhancing a healthy lifestyle. He needs to support his assertion with accurate evidence and other factors to convince his readers.
The claim states that many students are taking care of their physical fitness after or outside school. The statement presented by the writer does not consider all the students in the school. Additionally, the argument is not supported by data to emphasize his point. For example, there might be only a handful of students who go to the gym after school. This example can make the writer’s statement weak. Those students who went outside the school to perform physical fitness, what if they just went for only two or three days a week? There is no clear evidence that the students who went outside the school to do physical exercise would be in good physical condition. The writer needs to incorporate more evidence to support his claim that students who went outside the school to practice physical activity will be fit and healthy.
The writer has not incorporated claims that why school should not support physical education course. The writer believes that having intramural and varsity sports teams will eliminate the requirement of physical education. However, he did not support his argument by saying that the intramural and varsity sports team can play an important role in enhancing the fitness of all students. For instance, varsity sport only selects certain students to participate in the team. Thus, this implies that not all students can participate, and their wellness is not being maintained. The writer the argument is not substantive, he did not define the scope of his argument clearly. He needs to define the scope of his argument by providing enough claims and specific evidence to make the readers convinced of his claim.
The writer in Altamonte’s newspaper article did not support his assertion with enough substantive information to prove his point. His evidence did not persuade his idea that having an intramural and varsity sports team would help in enhancing the fitness of all students and there would be no necessity of having a physical education class in the school. To improve his assertion he needs to add more substantive evidence to support his idea, and he needs to elaborate on why he thinks his claim is necessary.