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In order to help small businesses thrive, government should
proactively take care of all the requirements that they are
facing. Only then one can expect these small businesses to gain
momentum and contribute to country's economic growth in future. Small
businesses face a lot of competition from bigger players in the
market, who can with the help of the copious amounts of cash they have
can subsidize their products in order to make it more lucrative to the
customer. Small businesses, however, do not have such financial
support to make their product competititve in the market, hence making
it difficult for them to thrive.
First red sentence highlighted: they WHO?? antecedents are the requirements itself ?? not possible.
Second red sentence: quite confused as sentence, we do not know which is which:who has the copious amounts of money ?? the SME or the big ones ??
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Appropriate government policies can play a very important role for
these business fledglings to thrive. Government can help these small
fledglings by providing them with tax relief for initial few years of
existence. Tax relief would be immensely helpful in reducing the
financial burden from the businesses' shoulders. For example, in order
to promote the startup culture in the country, government of India has
exempted startups from tax for initial three years. The decision has
been embraced by the startup community. Not only it has resulted in
making these startups successful, but it has also encouraged young
minds to start something of their own. Today there are hundreds of
startups opened every year with highly innovating ideas backing them
up. They will surely help in creating jobs and improving the economy
of the country.
First red sentence: you should use not only, but ALSO............the idea is good inserting the example of India businesses.
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However, it can be argued that the businesses thriving on their own
without the help of any external entity will be more successful
because it will force them to think of new ideas to make their
products better in terms of quality and final price paid by the
customer. While this is true, the probability of such a business
thriving is very low.
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