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Gre Issue essay
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18 Feb 2023, 18:01
18 Feb 2023, 18:01
Can anyone check my GRE Issue Essay-
Exploring different fields of knowledge helps an individual to become wiser and posse strong personality. Through process of acquiring knowledge from different faculties helps an individual to gain varieties of information which can allow an individual to develop a good moral character. However, sometimes knowledge we acquire may seem uncomprehensive and difficult, but repeated practice can help an individual to grasp it. Thus, through continuous practice of learning, can help an individual to absorb variety of information and also help them in exploring different field of knowledge.
Acquiring knowledge helps in divulging mysteries and complex information. When we gather more information from various sources, we will acquire skills of understanding and breaking down complex information into simple information. With vigorous practicing the idea of breaking down information, we will get familiar with content, and we will develop the capability to critically contemplate about the content. Application of critical thinking skills helps in rationalizing and analyzing the content provided. Consequently, we gradually start becoming curious about the topic and we try to find answers to our questions. Likewise, in research studies, the scientist studies a given topic, they use their knowledge and critical thinking skills to question the existence of a theory and they perform experiments to find answers to their given problem. Hence, acquiring knowledge helps in developing critical thinking skills which can help in undiscovering mysteries and complex information.
Through the process of gaining knowledge improves our learning abilities which can help us to comprehend different topics. From pre-school to high school, we have learned several things that have helped us to become who we are today. If we had not received our education, we would not be able to develop our moral and ethical character. Additionally, we won’t posse the ability to distinguish between just and unjust actions. Through our education, we were able to gain understanding and develop our decision by rationalizing the knowledge we had previously acquired.
Learning about complex information can lead to confusion and make it hard to decipher. We may come across different topics that were previously not taught or learned. When we start studying about them, it may seem hard to concur the provided information. The skepticism of not understanding the information correctly can make us think that the information provided in complex and it is hard to comprehend. However, repeated practices and learning about the information can help in understanding the information thoroughly. Likewise, when we were kids, we did not acquire all information easily, our parents and teachers patiently taught us how to read and understand the content and gradually we were able to acquire knowledge. Thus, the complex information may seem daunting initially, but by continuously practicing can help to learn that information.
The knowledge can be acquire by patiently practicing and by using critical reasoning skills which can help in analyzing complex information and breaking down them into simple information which can help in deciphering the information.
Exploring different fields of knowledge helps an individual to become wiser and posse strong personality. Through process of acquiring knowledge from different faculties helps an individual to gain varieties of information which can allow an individual to develop a good moral character. However, sometimes knowledge we acquire may seem uncomprehensive and difficult, but repeated practice can help an individual to grasp it. Thus, through continuous practice of learning, can help an individual to absorb variety of information and also help them in exploring different field of knowledge.
Acquiring knowledge helps in divulging mysteries and complex information. When we gather more information from various sources, we will acquire skills of understanding and breaking down complex information into simple information. With vigorous practicing the idea of breaking down information, we will get familiar with content, and we will develop the capability to critically contemplate about the content. Application of critical thinking skills helps in rationalizing and analyzing the content provided. Consequently, we gradually start becoming curious about the topic and we try to find answers to our questions. Likewise, in research studies, the scientist studies a given topic, they use their knowledge and critical thinking skills to question the existence of a theory and they perform experiments to find answers to their given problem. Hence, acquiring knowledge helps in developing critical thinking skills which can help in undiscovering mysteries and complex information.
Through the process of gaining knowledge improves our learning abilities which can help us to comprehend different topics. From pre-school to high school, we have learned several things that have helped us to become who we are today. If we had not received our education, we would not be able to develop our moral and ethical character. Additionally, we won’t posse the ability to distinguish between just and unjust actions. Through our education, we were able to gain understanding and develop our decision by rationalizing the knowledge we had previously acquired.
Learning about complex information can lead to confusion and make it hard to decipher. We may come across different topics that were previously not taught or learned. When we start studying about them, it may seem hard to concur the provided information. The skepticism of not understanding the information correctly can make us think that the information provided in complex and it is hard to comprehend. However, repeated practices and learning about the information can help in understanding the information thoroughly. Likewise, when we were kids, we did not acquire all information easily, our parents and teachers patiently taught us how to read and understand the content and gradually we were able to acquire knowledge. Thus, the complex information may seem daunting initially, but by continuously practicing can help to learn that information.
The knowledge can be acquire by patiently practicing and by using critical reasoning skills which can help in analyzing complex information and breaking down them into simple information which can help in deciphering the information.
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20 Feb 2023, 14:02
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1. You have written 402 words.
2. I count a total of 4 paragraphs.
3. You have written 20 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 20.10.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 0 first-person pronoun (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 46%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 40%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Acquiring knowledge helps in divulging mysteries and complex information.
I noticed that you started your essay with a short anecdote or narrative to spark interest in your topic. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
Hence, acquiring knowledge helps in developing critical thinking skills which can help in undiscovering mysteries and complex information.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
Through the process of gaining knowledge improves our learning abilities which can help us to comprehend different topics.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Learning about complex information can lead to confusion and make it hard to decipher.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - conclusion: 0%
Reformulation of the thesis:
The knowledge can be acquire by patiently practicing and by using critical reasoning skills which can help in analyzing complex information and breaking down them into simple information which can help in deciphering the information.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 36% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's acceptable. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 86%
Argument-related words: hence, research, studies, thus
Feedback: You have used only a few words related to argumentation. Expect the minimum score for minimal effort. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 53% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: analyze, process, research, source, theory, acquire, complex, capability, rationalize, topic, ethical
Feedback: 11% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 8
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ... breaking down information, we will get familiar with content, and we will develop the c...
Feedback: Use a plural form for more than one "familiar".
Suggestion: we will get familiars
You wrote: ... start becoming curious about the topic and we try to find answers to our questions...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...s to question the existence of a theory and they perform experiments to find answer...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...tical thinking skills which can help in undiscovering mysteries and complex information. Thro...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: discovering, rediscovering
You wrote: ...us to comprehend different topics. From pre-school to high school, we have learned several...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: preschool
You wrote: ...hat the information provided in complex and it is hard to comprehend. However, repe...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ... how to read and understand the content and gradually we were able to acquire knowl...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...o learn that information. The knowledge can be acquire by patiently practicing and by using cr...
Feedback: You need a participle after "can be." Do you mean "can be acquired", "can be acquiring" or simply "can acquire"?
Suggestion: can be acquired, can be acquiring, can acquire
1. You have written 402 words.
2. I count a total of 4 paragraphs.
3. You have written 20 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 20.10.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 0 first-person pronoun (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 46%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 40%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Acquiring knowledge helps in divulging mysteries and complex information.
I noticed that you started your essay with a short anecdote or narrative to spark interest in your topic. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
Hence, acquiring knowledge helps in developing critical thinking skills which can help in undiscovering mysteries and complex information.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
Through the process of gaining knowledge improves our learning abilities which can help us to comprehend different topics.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Learning about complex information can lead to confusion and make it hard to decipher.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - conclusion: 0%
Reformulation of the thesis:
The knowledge can be acquire by patiently practicing and by using critical reasoning skills which can help in analyzing complex information and breaking down them into simple information which can help in deciphering the information.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 36% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's acceptable. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 86%
Argument-related words: hence, research, studies, thus
Feedback: You have used only a few words related to argumentation. Expect the minimum score for minimal effort. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 53% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: analyze, process, research, source, theory, acquire, complex, capability, rationalize, topic, ethical
Feedback: 11% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 8
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ... breaking down information, we will get familiar with content, and we will develop the c...
Feedback: Use a plural form for more than one "familiar".
Suggestion: we will get familiars
You wrote: ... start becoming curious about the topic and we try to find answers to our questions...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...s to question the existence of a theory and they perform experiments to find answer...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...tical thinking skills which can help in undiscovering mysteries and complex information. Thro...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: discovering, rediscovering
You wrote: ...us to comprehend different topics. From pre-school to high school, we have learned several...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: preschool
You wrote: ...hat the information provided in complex and it is hard to comprehend. However, repe...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ... how to read and understand the content and gradually we were able to acquire knowl...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...o learn that information. The knowledge can be acquire by patiently practicing and by using cr...
Feedback: You need a participle after "can be." Do you mean "can be acquired", "can be acquiring" or simply "can acquire"?
Suggestion: can be acquired, can be acquiring, can acquire
Gre Issue essay
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19 Mar 2023, 03:48
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Overall, your essay discusses the benefits of exploring different fields of knowledge and how it can lead to becoming wiser and developing a strong personality. You provide examples of how acquiring knowledge can help in developing critical thinking skills, improving learning abilities, and understanding complex information. Your essay also emphasizes the importance of practice in acquiring knowledge and developing skills.
Here are a few suggestions to improve your essay:
1) Consider providing a clear thesis statement in the introduction that summarizes the main points you will discuss in the essay.
2) While you provide examples of how acquiring knowledge can help in developing critical thinking skills, improving learning abilities, and understanding complex information, you could also consider discussing other benefits of exploring different fields of knowledge, such as gaining a broader perspective, improving problem-solving abilities, and developing creativity.
3) Try to provide more specific examples or evidence to support your arguments. For instance, you could provide examples of individuals who have developed critical thinking skills through exploring different fields of knowledge or studies that have shown the benefits of acquiring knowledge in different areas.
4) Make sure to proofread your essay for grammar and spelling errors.
Overall, your essay provides a good start in discussing the benefits of exploring different fields of knowledge. By incorporating some of the suggestions above, you can strengthen your argument and provide a more compelling essay.
Here are a few suggestions to improve your essay:
1) Consider providing a clear thesis statement in the introduction that summarizes the main points you will discuss in the essay.
2) While you provide examples of how acquiring knowledge can help in developing critical thinking skills, improving learning abilities, and understanding complex information, you could also consider discussing other benefits of exploring different fields of knowledge, such as gaining a broader perspective, improving problem-solving abilities, and developing creativity.
3) Try to provide more specific examples or evidence to support your arguments. For instance, you could provide examples of individuals who have developed critical thinking skills through exploring different fields of knowledge or studies that have shown the benefits of acquiring knowledge in different areas.
4) Make sure to proofread your essay for grammar and spelling errors.
Overall, your essay provides a good start in discussing the benefits of exploring different fields of knowledge. By incorporating some of the suggestions above, you can strengthen your argument and provide a more compelling essay.
