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Re: Pls rate my AWA
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21 Apr 2024, 07:25
21 Apr 2024, 07:25
In today's world men and women are treated equally they have equal rights and opportunities. Their are many fields in which women have proved their significance. So, in this mordern society to think that there are no such tasks which men can peform and women cannot. But the speaker holds the belief that because of inherent physical difference there are many tasks for which women are not suited. If questioned I would completely disageree with this viewpoint. The various reasons and examples to support my point of view have been further elaborated.
Firstly, I admit that defenitely men have some physical advantage than women but that doesn't imply that they cannot outperform men in many tasks. It is the thinking of male who consider themselves superior to women. Generally, men do not want women to supress them cause it will hurt their ego, but as we are getting mordern we can see the open mindedness in men. Today they also respect women's desicion and also support them. Due to this development today women are able to work in similar environment as men. But there are still many societies in which women are not given due respect. They also suffer through domestic violence, but thanks to the government who has taken many steps towards women empowerment.
Secondly, It is men who didn't provide them the opportunity. Earlier men used to thing that women can only do household chores. But as we have advanced we can see various fields in which women have entered. For instance, consider the example of any nations military, their was no nation who allowed women in their army. As the time passed, we can see women that they have proved their significancen in army, navy or even in air force.
Lastly, in my opinion women have more physical strength than men. The amount of pain they suffer during pregnancy. It is not a joke to keep a baby in womb for nine months and no men can even imagine the insufferable pain during delivery. And women are a very exccellent multi-tasker. For example, women can do both the job of taking care of the house along with earning.
To summarize, in my opinion women can do any task which men can do. Hence, I completely disagree with speakers's viewpoint.
Firstly, I admit that defenitely men have some physical advantage than women but that doesn't imply that they cannot outperform men in many tasks. It is the thinking of male who consider themselves superior to women. Generally, men do not want women to supress them cause it will hurt their ego, but as we are getting mordern we can see the open mindedness in men. Today they also respect women's desicion and also support them. Due to this development today women are able to work in similar environment as men. But there are still many societies in which women are not given due respect. They also suffer through domestic violence, but thanks to the government who has taken many steps towards women empowerment.
Secondly, It is men who didn't provide them the opportunity. Earlier men used to thing that women can only do household chores. But as we have advanced we can see various fields in which women have entered. For instance, consider the example of any nations military, their was no nation who allowed women in their army. As the time passed, we can see women that they have proved their significancen in army, navy or even in air force.
Lastly, in my opinion women have more physical strength than men. The amount of pain they suffer during pregnancy. It is not a joke to keep a baby in womb for nine months and no men can even imagine the insufferable pain during delivery. And women are a very exccellent multi-tasker. For example, women can do both the job of taking care of the house along with earning.
To summarize, in my opinion women can do any task which men can do. Hence, I completely disagree with speakers's viewpoint.
Re: Pls rate my AWA
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21 Apr 2024, 09:36
21 Apr 2024, 09:36
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Assignment Score: 60.75
Statistics
1. You have written 382 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 25 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 15.28.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 6 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 53%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is not very dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 40/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 55%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
In today's world men and women are treated equally they have equal rights and opportunities.
I noticed that you started your essay with a short anecdote or narrative to spark interest in your topic. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The various reasons and examples to support my point of view have been further elaborated.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 50%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, I admit that defenitely men have some physical advantage than women but that doesn't imply that they cannot outperform men in many tasks.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good. You can improve this feature of your essay by strengthening your claim with provocative words.
Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 45%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, It is men who didn't provide them the opportunity.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, in my opinion women have more physical strength than men.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 33%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, in my opinion women can do any task which men can do.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 0% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 100%
Argument-related words: because, belief, hence, opinion, point, point of view, proved, reasons, so, support, view
Feedback: You have used many words related to argumentation. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 59% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: environment, significance, similar, imply, instance, physical, task, domestic, job, summarize, inherent, military
Feedback: 12% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 24
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...ey have equal rights and opportunities. Their are many fields in which women have pro...
Feedback: You seem to have confused the possessive adjective "their" with the existential "there." Did you mean "there"?
Suggestion: There
You wrote: ... proved their significance. So, in this mordern society to think that there are no such...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: modern
You wrote: ...t there are no such tasks which men can peform and women cannot. But the speaker holds...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: perform, reform, deform, preform
You wrote: ...y tasks for which women are not suited. If questioned I would completely disageree...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...h women are not suited. If questioned I would completely disageree with this viewpoint. The vari...
Feedback: Usually in a second conditional structure, we put a past tense verb in the if-clause, and would + infinitive in the result-clause. Here you have used "would" in the if-clause. Did you mean ""?
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...uited. If questioned I would completely disageree with this viewpoint. The various reason...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: disagree
You wrote: ...rther elaborated. Firstly, I admit that defenitely men have some physical advantage than w...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: definitely
You wrote: ...en. Generally, men do not want women to supress them cause it will hurt their ego, but ...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: suppress
You wrote: ...l hurt their ego, but as we are getting mordern we can see the open mindedness in men. ...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: modern
You wrote: ...in men. Today they also respect women's desicion and also support them. Due to this deve...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: decision, depiction, derision
You wrote: ...rnment who has taken many steps towards women empowerment. Secondly, It is men who di...
Feedback: Use an apostrophe +s to show possession. The empowerment belong to , right?
Suggestion: towards women's empowerment
You wrote: ...ps towards women empowerment. Secondly, It is men who didn't provide them the oppo...
Feedback: Do not capitalize pronouns mid-sentence.
Suggestion: , it
You wrote: ...ndly, It is men who didn't provide them the opportunity. Earlier men used to thing ...
Feedback: You are missing a preposition. Revise: "provide them with the opportunity". Why? The verb "provide" always needs a preposition after the object (them) when there is an indirect object (the opportunity).
Suggestion: provide them with the opportunity
You wrote: ... opportunity. Earlier men used to thing that women can only do household chores. But...
Feedback: **Use "that" with singular nouns and "those" with plural nouns. Did you mean "those"?
Suggestion: those
You wrote: ...er the example of any nations military, their was no nation who allowed women in thei...
Feedback: You seem to have confused the possessive adjective "their" with the existential "there." Did you mean "there"?
Suggestion: there
You wrote: ...n see women that they have proved their significancen in army, navy or even in air force. Las...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: significance, significance n
You wrote: ...they have proved their significancen in army, navy or even in air force. Lastly, in ...
Feedback: The article is missing before the noun: "an army", "the army". (ART018)
Suggestion: an army, the army
You wrote: ... army, navy or even in air force. Lastly, in my opinion women have more physical strength than men. The am...
Feedback: Put a comma after introductory prepositional phrases. Did you mean " in my opinion, women have"?
Suggestion: in my opinion, women have
You wrote: .... The amount of pain they suffer during pregnancy. It is not a joke to keep a baby in wom...
Feedback: You need an article or plural here. (ap33)
Suggestion: during a pregnancy, during pregnancies
You wrote: ...ncy. It is not a joke to keep a baby in womb for nine months and no men can even ima...
Feedback: The article is missing before the noun: "a womb", "the womb". (ART018)
Suggestion: a womb, the womb
You wrote: ...en imagine the insufferable pain during delivery. And women are a very exccellent multi-...
Feedback: You need an article or plural here. (ap33)
Suggestion: during a delivery, during deliveries
You wrote: ...n during delivery. And women are a very exccellent multi-tasker. For example, women can do...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: excellent
You wrote: ...livery. And women are a very exccellent multi-tasker. For example, women can do both the job...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: multitask, multitasks
You wrote: ...n do. Hence, I completely disagree with speakers's viewpoint.
Feedback: Did you mean this? "speaker's" or "speakers'"?
Suggestion: speaker's, speakers'
Statistics
1. You have written 382 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 25 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 15.28.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 6 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 53%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is not very dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 40/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 55%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
In today's world men and women are treated equally they have equal rights and opportunities.
I noticed that you started your essay with a short anecdote or narrative to spark interest in your topic. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The various reasons and examples to support my point of view have been further elaborated.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 50%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, I admit that defenitely men have some physical advantage than women but that doesn't imply that they cannot outperform men in many tasks.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good. You can improve this feature of your essay by strengthening your claim with provocative words.
Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 45%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, It is men who didn't provide them the opportunity.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, in my opinion women have more physical strength than men.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 33%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, in my opinion women can do any task which men can do.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 0% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 100%
Argument-related words: because, belief, hence, opinion, point, point of view, proved, reasons, so, support, view
Feedback: You have used many words related to argumentation. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 59% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: environment, significance, similar, imply, instance, physical, task, domestic, job, summarize, inherent, military
Feedback: 12% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 24
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...ey have equal rights and opportunities. Their are many fields in which women have pro...
Feedback: You seem to have confused the possessive adjective "their" with the existential "there." Did you mean "there"?
Suggestion: There
You wrote: ... proved their significance. So, in this mordern society to think that there are no such...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: modern
You wrote: ...t there are no such tasks which men can peform and women cannot. But the speaker holds...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: perform, reform, deform, preform
You wrote: ...y tasks for which women are not suited. If questioned I would completely disageree...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...h women are not suited. If questioned I would completely disageree with this viewpoint. The vari...
Feedback: Usually in a second conditional structure, we put a past tense verb in the if-clause, and would + infinitive in the result-clause. Here you have used "would" in the if-clause. Did you mean ""?
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...uited. If questioned I would completely disageree with this viewpoint. The various reason...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: disagree
You wrote: ...rther elaborated. Firstly, I admit that defenitely men have some physical advantage than w...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: definitely
You wrote: ...en. Generally, men do not want women to supress them cause it will hurt their ego, but ...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: suppress
You wrote: ...l hurt their ego, but as we are getting mordern we can see the open mindedness in men. ...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: modern
You wrote: ...in men. Today they also respect women's desicion and also support them. Due to this deve...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: decision, depiction, derision
You wrote: ...rnment who has taken many steps towards women empowerment. Secondly, It is men who di...
Feedback: Use an apostrophe +s to show possession. The empowerment belong to , right?
Suggestion: towards women's empowerment
You wrote: ...ps towards women empowerment. Secondly, It is men who didn't provide them the oppo...
Feedback: Do not capitalize pronouns mid-sentence.
Suggestion: , it
You wrote: ...ndly, It is men who didn't provide them the opportunity. Earlier men used to thing ...
Feedback: You are missing a preposition. Revise: "provide them with the opportunity". Why? The verb "provide" always needs a preposition after the object (them) when there is an indirect object (the opportunity).
Suggestion: provide them with the opportunity
You wrote: ... opportunity. Earlier men used to thing that women can only do household chores. But...
Feedback: **Use "that" with singular nouns and "those" with plural nouns. Did you mean "those"?
Suggestion: those
You wrote: ...er the example of any nations military, their was no nation who allowed women in thei...
Feedback: You seem to have confused the possessive adjective "their" with the existential "there." Did you mean "there"?
Suggestion: there
You wrote: ...n see women that they have proved their significancen in army, navy or even in air force. Las...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: significance, significance n
You wrote: ...they have proved their significancen in army, navy or even in air force. Lastly, in ...
Feedback: The article is missing before the noun: "an army", "the army". (ART018)
Suggestion: an army, the army
You wrote: ... army, navy or even in air force. Lastly, in my opinion women have more physical strength than men. The am...
Feedback: Put a comma after introductory prepositional phrases. Did you mean " in my opinion, women have"?
Suggestion: in my opinion, women have
You wrote: .... The amount of pain they suffer during pregnancy. It is not a joke to keep a baby in wom...
Feedback: You need an article or plural here. (ap33)
Suggestion: during a pregnancy, during pregnancies
You wrote: ...ncy. It is not a joke to keep a baby in womb for nine months and no men can even ima...
Feedback: The article is missing before the noun: "a womb", "the womb". (ART018)
Suggestion: a womb, the womb
You wrote: ...en imagine the insufferable pain during delivery. And women are a very exccellent multi-...
Feedback: You need an article or plural here. (ap33)
Suggestion: during a delivery, during deliveries
You wrote: ...n during delivery. And women are a very exccellent multi-tasker. For example, women can do...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: excellent
You wrote: ...livery. And women are a very exccellent multi-tasker. For example, women can do both the job...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: multitask, multitasks
You wrote: ...n do. Hence, I completely disagree with speakers's viewpoint.
Feedback: Did you mean this? "speaker's" or "speakers'"?
Suggestion: speaker's, speakers'
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Re: Pls rate my AWA [#permalink]
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