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01 May 2024, 11:27
01 May 2024, 11:27
Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice, even though they might deny such a preference.
Making a choice is a difficult process. But what if we decrease the number of option, will it make easy to select an option? Technically, Yes. So, the speaker suggest that
people prefer restriction and regulations to absolute freedom of choice even though they seem to deny it. If questioned I would completely agree with speaker's view point. The various reasons and examples to support my preposition have been further elaborated.
Firstly, the more the number of choices the more we will get confused. If you are not good at making quick decisions than the number of choices can drastically affect you. We have to make decision at every point of life. Consider the example of school where in higher secondary we were asked to select a stream. This was a quite tough decision for many students. At that time I was also confused which stream to select, I also wished if there would have been some other options it would have been beneficial cause I didn't had clear idea what I wanted to pursue. But the reality is more options would have caused more confusion to me at that time.
Secondly, as the number of choices increases your time to make a decision also increases. You have to filter out all the options which are not suited to you and then you have compare the remaining options. For example, consider the example when we wanted to purchase a car. As we know now there have been many options in car, so to select one among them is quite a difficult job. So, we first filtered out according to price, then according to manufacturer, then which model we want to purchase, and after all other specifications we finally decided which car to purchase.
Lastly, I am not suggesting that it's always helpful when there are less number of choices. I only meant to say that it only makes it easy to take a decision quickly. There are certain fields where having choices is must. For instance, consider from the political point of view it has become very necessary to have various candidates to fight for election. If we only have two or three options then there is high chance that only a particular party wins all the time, which would allow the party to do whatever they want.
To summarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make quick decision, but there are some circumstances where we need more choices. Hence, i completely agree with speaker's viewpoint.
Making a choice is a difficult process. But what if we decrease the number of option, will it make easy to select an option? Technically, Yes. So, the speaker suggest that
people prefer restriction and regulations to absolute freedom of choice even though they seem to deny it. If questioned I would completely agree with speaker's view point. The various reasons and examples to support my preposition have been further elaborated.
Firstly, the more the number of choices the more we will get confused. If you are not good at making quick decisions than the number of choices can drastically affect you. We have to make decision at every point of life. Consider the example of school where in higher secondary we were asked to select a stream. This was a quite tough decision for many students. At that time I was also confused which stream to select, I also wished if there would have been some other options it would have been beneficial cause I didn't had clear idea what I wanted to pursue. But the reality is more options would have caused more confusion to me at that time.
Secondly, as the number of choices increases your time to make a decision also increases. You have to filter out all the options which are not suited to you and then you have compare the remaining options. For example, consider the example when we wanted to purchase a car. As we know now there have been many options in car, so to select one among them is quite a difficult job. So, we first filtered out according to price, then according to manufacturer, then which model we want to purchase, and after all other specifications we finally decided which car to purchase.
Lastly, I am not suggesting that it's always helpful when there are less number of choices. I only meant to say that it only makes it easy to take a decision quickly. There are certain fields where having choices is must. For instance, consider from the political point of view it has become very necessary to have various candidates to fight for election. If we only have two or three options then there is high chance that only a particular party wins all the time, which would allow the party to do whatever they want.
To summarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make quick decision, but there are some circumstances where we need more choices. Hence, i completely agree with speaker's viewpoint.
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1. You have written 440 words.
2. I count a total of 7 paragraphs.
3. You have written 26 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 16.92.
5. You have written 1 question.
6. You have used 12 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 66%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is quite dynamic. You write a variety of short sentences and long sentences. Increase the variance in your sentence length to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 55%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice, even though they might deny such a preference.
I noticed that you started your essay with quote or a claim by a notable figure to engage your reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice, even though they might deny such a preference.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Making a choice is a difficult process.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 50%
Topic sentence:
people prefer restriction and regulations to absolute freedom of choice even though they seem to deny it.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, the more the number of choices the more we will get confused.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - supporting argument: 75%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, as the number of choices increases your time to make a decision also increases.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have used a word commonly used when giving evidence. That's good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 6 - supporting argument: 70%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, I am not suggesting that it's always helpful when there are less number of choices.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 7 - conclusion: 0%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make quick decision, but there are some circumstances where we need more choices.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 10% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: hence, point, point of view, reasons, so, support, view
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 70% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: beneficial, process, specification, affect, purchase, regulation, restriction, select, circumstance, instance, job, option, summarize, pursue, deny
Feedback: 15% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 19
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...tion? Technically, Yes. So, the speaker suggest that people prefer restriction and regu...
Feedback: You have a problem with your verb agreement. The verb "suggest" should either be in the past tense or agree with the third person singular subject "the speaker'. Did you mean "the speaker suggested that" or "the speaker suggests that"? (va1)
Suggestion: the speaker suggested that, the speaker suggests that
You wrote: ...hoice even though they seem to deny it. If questioned I would completely agree wit...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...h they seem to deny it. If questioned I would completely agree with speaker's view point. The va...
Feedback: Usually in a second conditional structure, we put a past tense verb in the if-clause, and would + infinitive in the result-clause. Here you have used "would" in the if-clause. Did you mean ""?
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...uestioned I would completely agree with speaker's view point. The various reasons and exa...
Feedback: The word "speaker's" is a singular possessive form of a noun. Therefore, you need an article before it, or you should change it to a plural possessive form.
Suggestion: with a speaker's view, with speakers' view
You wrote: ... choices the more we will get confused. If you are not good at making quick decisi...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...tream to select, I also wished if there would have been some other options it would have been b...
Feedback: Did you mean this? "had been"? (Conditional error)
Suggestion: had been
You wrote: ...r options it would have been beneficial cause I didn't had clear idea what I wanted t...
Feedback: You have used "cause" instead of "because." "Cause" is a verb. "Because" is a conjunction. Did you mean "because I"?
Suggestion: because I
You wrote: ...uld have been beneficial cause I didn't had clear idea what I wanted to pursue. But...
Feedback: The auxiliary verb "didn't" requires the base form of this verb: "have".
Suggestion: have
You wrote: ...e number of choices increases your time to make a decision also increases. You have to filter out all t...
Feedback: Try to be less wordy. Instead of saying "to make a decision," write "to decide".
Suggestion: to decide
You wrote: ...the options which are not suited to you and then you have compare the remaining opt...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...are not suited to you and then you have compare the remaining options. For example, con...
Feedback: Use a past participle here: "compared".
Suggestion: compared
You wrote: ...now now there have been many options in car, so to select one among them is quite a...
Feedback: The article is missing before the noun: "a car", "the car". (ART018)
Suggestion: a car, the car
You wrote: ...that it's always helpful when there are less number of choices. I only meant to say that it...
Feedback: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean "less numb"?
Suggestion: less numb
You wrote: ...meant to say that it only makes it easy to take a decision quickly. There are certain fields where having ...
Feedback: Try to be less wordy. Instead of saying "to take a decision," write "to decide".
Suggestion: to decide
You wrote: ...igh chance that only a particular party wins all the time, which would allow the par...
Feedback: Do not use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean to use a singular form or a plural?
Suggestion: a particular party win, particular party wins
You wrote: ...ey want. To summarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make qui...
Feedback: This is probably the wrong word for this context. "Less" is the comparative form of the adjective "little". Use "less" with uncountable nouns like "energy" or "time". "Fewer" is the comparative form of "few". Use "fewer" with countable nouns like "options" Did you mean "fewer options"?
Suggestion: fewer options
You wrote: ...ummarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make quick decision, but the...
Feedback: Instead of the word 'sometime', which means 'at an indefinite time in the future, perhaps you meant 'sometimes', which means 'occasionally, not always'. Consider changing it to "sometimes so".
Suggestion: sometimes so
You wrote: ...nces where we need more choices. Hence, i completely agree with speaker's viewpoi...
Feedback: This should be written in uppercase.
Suggestion: I
You wrote: ...choices. Hence, i completely agree with speaker's viewpoint.
Feedback: The word "speaker's" is a singular possessive form of a noun. Therefore, you need an article before it, or you should change it to a plural possessive form.
Suggestion: with a speaker's viewpoint, with speakers' viewpoint
1. You have written 440 words.
2. I count a total of 7 paragraphs.
3. You have written 26 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 16.92.
5. You have written 1 question.
6. You have used 12 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 66%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is quite dynamic. You write a variety of short sentences and long sentences. Increase the variance in your sentence length to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 55%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice, even though they might deny such a preference.
I noticed that you started your essay with quote or a claim by a notable figure to engage your reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
Most people prefer restrictions and regulations to absolute freedom of choice, even though they might deny such a preference.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Making a choice is a difficult process.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 50%
Topic sentence:
people prefer restriction and regulations to absolute freedom of choice even though they seem to deny it.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, the more the number of choices the more we will get confused.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - supporting argument: 75%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, as the number of choices increases your time to make a decision also increases.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have used a word commonly used when giving evidence. That's good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 6 - supporting argument: 70%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, I am not suggesting that it's always helpful when there are less number of choices.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 7 - conclusion: 0%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make quick decision, but there are some circumstances where we need more choices.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 10% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: hence, point, point of view, reasons, so, support, view
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 70% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: beneficial, process, specification, affect, purchase, regulation, restriction, select, circumstance, instance, job, option, summarize, pursue, deny
Feedback: 15% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 19
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
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You wrote: ...tion? Technically, Yes. So, the speaker suggest that people prefer restriction and regu...
Feedback: You have a problem with your verb agreement. The verb "suggest" should either be in the past tense or agree with the third person singular subject "the speaker'. Did you mean "the speaker suggested that" or "the speaker suggests that"? (va1)
Suggestion: the speaker suggested that, the speaker suggests that
You wrote: ...hoice even though they seem to deny it. If questioned I would completely agree wit...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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You wrote: ...h they seem to deny it. If questioned I would completely agree with speaker's view point. The va...
Feedback: Usually in a second conditional structure, we put a past tense verb in the if-clause, and would + infinitive in the result-clause. Here you have used "would" in the if-clause. Did you mean ""?
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You wrote: ...uestioned I would completely agree with speaker's view point. The various reasons and exa...
Feedback: The word "speaker's" is a singular possessive form of a noun. Therefore, you need an article before it, or you should change it to a plural possessive form.
Suggestion: with a speaker's view, with speakers' view
You wrote: ... choices the more we will get confused. If you are not good at making quick decisi...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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You wrote: ...tream to select, I also wished if there would have been some other options it would have been b...
Feedback: Did you mean this? "had been"? (Conditional error)
Suggestion: had been
You wrote: ...r options it would have been beneficial cause I didn't had clear idea what I wanted t...
Feedback: You have used "cause" instead of "because." "Cause" is a verb. "Because" is a conjunction. Did you mean "because I"?
Suggestion: because I
You wrote: ...uld have been beneficial cause I didn't had clear idea what I wanted to pursue. But...
Feedback: The auxiliary verb "didn't" requires the base form of this verb: "have".
Suggestion: have
You wrote: ...e number of choices increases your time to make a decision also increases. You have to filter out all t...
Feedback: Try to be less wordy. Instead of saying "to make a decision," write "to decide".
Suggestion: to decide
You wrote: ...the options which are not suited to you and then you have compare the remaining opt...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ...are not suited to you and then you have compare the remaining options. For example, con...
Feedback: Use a past participle here: "compared".
Suggestion: compared
You wrote: ...now now there have been many options in car, so to select one among them is quite a...
Feedback: The article is missing before the noun: "a car", "the car". (ART018)
Suggestion: a car, the car
You wrote: ...that it's always helpful when there are less number of choices. I only meant to say that it...
Feedback: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean "less numb"?
Suggestion: less numb
You wrote: ...meant to say that it only makes it easy to take a decision quickly. There are certain fields where having ...
Feedback: Try to be less wordy. Instead of saying "to take a decision," write "to decide".
Suggestion: to decide
You wrote: ...igh chance that only a particular party wins all the time, which would allow the par...
Feedback: Do not use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean to use a singular form or a plural?
Suggestion: a particular party win, particular party wins
You wrote: ...ey want. To summarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make qui...
Feedback: This is probably the wrong word for this context. "Less" is the comparative form of the adjective "little". Use "less" with uncountable nouns like "energy" or "time". "Fewer" is the comparative form of "few". Use "fewer" with countable nouns like "options" Did you mean "fewer options"?
Suggestion: fewer options
You wrote: ...ummarize, I prefer to have less options sometime so that I can make quick decision, but the...
Feedback: Instead of the word 'sometime', which means 'at an indefinite time in the future, perhaps you meant 'sometimes', which means 'occasionally, not always'. Consider changing it to "sometimes so".
Suggestion: sometimes so
You wrote: ...nces where we need more choices. Hence, i completely agree with speaker's viewpoi...
Feedback: This should be written in uppercase.
Suggestion: I
You wrote: ...choices. Hence, i completely agree with speaker's viewpoint.
Feedback: The word "speaker's" is a singular possessive form of a noun. Therefore, you need an article before it, or you should change it to a plural possessive form.
Suggestion: with a speaker's viewpoint, with speakers' viewpoint
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