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Re: Pls rate my AWA out of 6
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12 Apr 2024, 07:13
12 Apr 2024, 07:13
Statement:
The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.
Essay:
The cultural values are generally inherited from our ancestors. It may get some modifications due to the society we live in and it is the duty of every individual to preserve their own culture. In order to pass it to the future generation the present youth must follow their cultures properly. So, the speaker suggests that to understand the contemporary culture one needs to analyze the trends of its youth. If questioned I would strongly support this viewpoint. The various reasons and examples to elaborate my viewpoint have been elaborated further.
Firstly, there are numerous types of culture in our world, it’s because when one family moves from one society to another they are exposed to new cultures and this has huge impact on them. So their cultures becomes a mixture of their inherited and the one that their surrounding follows. For instance, consider the example of Sindhis who travelled from Pakistan to India during partition. They definitely follow their own culture but we can clearly see a major impact of the society. As many children in Sindhi families don’t know their mother tongue. So, one can extrapolate from this the cultural trends by analyzing the dedication of the youth to follow their culture.
Secondly, cultural values are like inherited property, it must be successfully passed down to further generation. Festivals plays a major role in preserving a culture. Schools should teach this youths the importance of the festival and why we celebrate it. For example, in Gujarat everybody flies kite on Uttarayan and perform certain rituals. But very few know the reason behind this celebration. So, it is the duty of parents and teachers to explain the reason behind celebration of each festival.
Lastly, social media has been very influencial in developing cultural values. Youths are getting more and more exposed about their religions through various social media platforms. This helps them to maintain their interest and they can easily connect with people following particular belief. Nowadays, Instagram has power to bring back the faith in those who stopped following. Consider, the inauguration of Ram Mandir, which was celebrated like a festival in India and all this was possible due to social media which inspired thousands of people to celebrate on this auspicious event. Thus, we can say that social media has the power to morph the youth.
To summarize, in order to understand any cultural trend we must analyze the youths for it. I completely agree with this viewpoint.
The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.
Essay:
The cultural values are generally inherited from our ancestors. It may get some modifications due to the society we live in and it is the duty of every individual to preserve their own culture. In order to pass it to the future generation the present youth must follow their cultures properly. So, the speaker suggests that to understand the contemporary culture one needs to analyze the trends of its youth. If questioned I would strongly support this viewpoint. The various reasons and examples to elaborate my viewpoint have been elaborated further.
Firstly, there are numerous types of culture in our world, it’s because when one family moves from one society to another they are exposed to new cultures and this has huge impact on them. So their cultures becomes a mixture of their inherited and the one that their surrounding follows. For instance, consider the example of Sindhis who travelled from Pakistan to India during partition. They definitely follow their own culture but we can clearly see a major impact of the society. As many children in Sindhi families don’t know their mother tongue. So, one can extrapolate from this the cultural trends by analyzing the dedication of the youth to follow their culture.
Secondly, cultural values are like inherited property, it must be successfully passed down to further generation. Festivals plays a major role in preserving a culture. Schools should teach this youths the importance of the festival and why we celebrate it. For example, in Gujarat everybody flies kite on Uttarayan and perform certain rituals. But very few know the reason behind this celebration. So, it is the duty of parents and teachers to explain the reason behind celebration of each festival.
Lastly, social media has been very influencial in developing cultural values. Youths are getting more and more exposed about their religions through various social media platforms. This helps them to maintain their interest and they can easily connect with people following particular belief. Nowadays, Instagram has power to bring back the faith in those who stopped following. Consider, the inauguration of Ram Mandir, which was celebrated like a festival in India and all this was possible due to social media which inspired thousands of people to celebrate on this auspicious event. Thus, we can say that social media has the power to morph the youth.
To summarize, in order to understand any cultural trend we must analyze the youths for it. I completely agree with this viewpoint.
Re: Pls rate my AWA out of 6
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12 Apr 2024, 08:28
12 Apr 2024, 08:28
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Assignment Score: 67.75
Statistics
1. You have written 411 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 26 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 15.81.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 3 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 80%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
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Cliches:
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Exclamation marks:
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Essay structure and content: 63%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 66%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
The cultural values are generally inherited from our ancestors.
I was expecting to find a question, a quote, a statistic, or an anecdote in your first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to use either a question, a quote, or a statistic to engage your readers attention at the beginning of your essay. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The various reasons and examples to elaborate my viewpoint have been elaborated further.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 65%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, there are numerous types of culture in our world, it’s because when one family moves from one society to another they are exposed to new cultures and this has huge impact on them.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
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Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 65%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, cultural values are like inherited property, it must be successfully passed down to further generation.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 60%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, social media has been very influencial in developing cultural values.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 66%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, in order to understand any cultural trend we must analyze the youths for it.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 0% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like must
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Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: because, belief, reason, reasons, so, support, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 53% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: analyze, individual, major, role, culture, cultural, impact, maintain, instance, summarize, expose, generation, modification, trend, contemporary, medium
Feedback: 16% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 13
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...fications due to the society we live in and it is the duty of every individual to p...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ... to understand the contemporary culture one needs to analyze the trends of its youth. If ...
Feedback: Use a singular form after the number one like this: "one need".
Suggestion: one need
You wrote: ...eds to analyze the trends of its youth. If questioned I would strongly support thi...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...he trends of its youth. If questioned I would strongly support this viewpoint. The various rea...
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Suggestion:
You wrote: ...tures and this has huge impact on them. So their cultures becomes a mixture of the...
Feedback: Put a comma after the introductory adverb phrase (So -> So,).
Suggestion: So,
You wrote: ... this has huge impact on them. So their cultures becomes a mixture of their inherited an...
Feedback: Use the singular form with "becomes." Alternatively, conjugate your verb for a plural subject.
Suggestion: their culture becomes, their cultures become
You wrote: ...ce, consider the example of Sindhis who travelled from Pakistan to India during partition...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: traveled, travel led
You wrote: ...travelled from Pakistan to India during partition. They definitely follow their own cultu...
Feedback: You need an article or plural here. (ap33)
Suggestion: during a partition, during partitions
You wrote: ...hey definitely follow their own culture but we can clearly see a major impact of th...
Feedback: Use a comma before "but" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , but
You wrote: ...arly see a major impact of the society. As many children in Sindhi families don’t ...
Feedback: "As" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ully passed down to further generation. Festivals plays a major role in preserving a culture. S...
Feedback: Possible agreement error. You should probably use this instead: "festival plays".
Suggestion: Festival plays
You wrote: ...val. Lastly, social media has been very influencial in developing cultural values. Youths a...
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You wrote: ...s helps them to maintain their interest and they can easily connect with people fol...
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Suggestion: , and
Statistics
1. You have written 411 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 26 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 15.81.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 3 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 80%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay contains words that will provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 80/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 63%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 66%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
The cultural values are generally inherited from our ancestors.
I was expecting to find a question, a quote, a statistic, or an anecdote in your first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to use either a question, a quote, or a statistic to engage your readers attention at the beginning of your essay. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The various reasons and examples to elaborate my viewpoint have been elaborated further.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 65%
Topic sentence:
Firstly, there are numerous types of culture in our world, it’s because when one family moves from one society to another they are exposed to new cultures and this has huge impact on them.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 65%
Topic sentence:
Secondly, cultural values are like inherited property, it must be successfully passed down to further generation.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 60%
Topic sentence:
Lastly, social media has been very influencial in developing cultural values.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 66%
Reformulation of the thesis:
To summarize, in order to understand any cultural trend we must analyze the youths for it.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 0% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like must
You made a recommendation. That's good. It is a good practice in an essay of this type to recommend a course of action to your reader. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: because, belief, reason, reasons, so, support, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 53% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: analyze, individual, major, role, culture, cultural, impact, maintain, instance, summarize, expose, generation, modification, trend, contemporary, medium
Feedback: 16% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 13
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...fications due to the society we live in and it is the duty of every individual to p...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
You wrote: ... to understand the contemporary culture one needs to analyze the trends of its youth. If ...
Feedback: Use a singular form after the number one like this: "one need".
Suggestion: one need
You wrote: ...eds to analyze the trends of its youth. If questioned I would strongly support thi...
Feedback: "If" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...he trends of its youth. If questioned I would strongly support this viewpoint. The various rea...
Feedback: Usually in a second conditional structure, we put a past tense verb in the if-clause, and would + infinitive in the result-clause. Here you have used "would" in the if-clause. Did you mean ""?
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...tures and this has huge impact on them. So their cultures becomes a mixture of the...
Feedback: Put a comma after the introductory adverb phrase (So -> So,).
Suggestion: So,
You wrote: ... this has huge impact on them. So their cultures becomes a mixture of their inherited an...
Feedback: Use the singular form with "becomes." Alternatively, conjugate your verb for a plural subject.
Suggestion: their culture becomes, their cultures become
You wrote: ...ce, consider the example of Sindhis who travelled from Pakistan to India during partition...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: traveled, travel led
You wrote: ...travelled from Pakistan to India during partition. They definitely follow their own cultu...
Feedback: You need an article or plural here. (ap33)
Suggestion: during a partition, during partitions
You wrote: ...hey definitely follow their own culture but we can clearly see a major impact of th...
Feedback: Use a comma before "but" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , but
You wrote: ...arly see a major impact of the society. As many children in Sindhi families don’t ...
Feedback: "As" at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ully passed down to further generation. Festivals plays a major role in preserving a culture. S...
Feedback: Possible agreement error. You should probably use this instead: "festival plays".
Suggestion: Festival plays
You wrote: ...val. Lastly, social media has been very influencial in developing cultural values. Youths a...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: influential
You wrote: ...s helps them to maintain their interest and they can easily connect with people fol...
Feedback: Use a comma before "and" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , and
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