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Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote
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23 Nov 2023, 05:11
23 Nov 2023, 05:11
Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Introduction- While some human beings think corporate responsibility should be promoted by companies, others believe corporations' only duty is increasing their revenue within the limit of law. I agree with the previous one, that states businesses should strive for the well-being of society and environment. First, if a company is socially responsible, it could decrease its costs. Secondly, corporate responsibility may bolster a business’s relationships with customers.
Body Paragraph 1- Corporate social responsibility has become a buzzword in the business world in recent years. Companies are expected to be not only profitable but also ethical and socially responsible. There are dozens of benefits of being a socially responsible company, one of the main benefits of promoting the well-being of society is profitability. The introduction of energy efficiencies and waste recycling cuts operational costs and benefits the environment. Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR) also increases company accountability and transparency with investment analyses and the media, shareholders and local communities. This in turn enhances its reputation among investors such as mutual funds that integrate CSR into their stock. The result is a virtuous circle where the company’s stock value increases and its access to investment capital is eased. For example, in 1991 Coca-Cola started using recyclable materials to make plant bottles and eventually shifted entirely to recycled materials. In that year, compared with the previous years, the company’s revenue increased by 47% and the company also kept its stakeholders satisfied.
Body paragraph 2- Another main advantage of taking CSR seriously is ensuring better customer relations. Consumers are more informed in today’s digitized environment. They understand that they have a role to play in improving this world, and as a result, partnering with socially responsible businesses gives them a sense of belonging. Most customers - 77 per cent according to a survey by branding company Landor Associates cited by the University of Pennsylvania’s Wharton School- think that companies should be socially responsible. Consumers are drawn to those companies that have a reputation for being good corporate citizens. Research at Tilburg University in the Netherlands showed that consumers are prepared to pay a 10 per cent higher price for products they deem socially responsible. To conclude, when they purchase an item from a socially responsible company, they feel proud to take a role in enhancing the well-being of society and the environment.
Counterargument(attacking)- Some people can counter-argue that a business’s only responsibility should be raising its profit on condition that it operates within the law. This view could be supported for several reasons. For instance, if a company starts to invest its resources in social responsibility, it will raise the cost of operation. There will be more money needed to produce eco-friendly products, use renewable energy resources, and recycle waste materials. All of them may increase the burden on customers by raising prices to counterbalance rising expenditure. Another point is losing sight of what matters. Sometimes when companies are fully invested in external activities that take them away from their work, they may lose sight of what matters. Companies may start doing CSR just because you get traction and attention. Some may resort to attracting several people with empty promises and hallow campaigns. All of these justify focusing on only making as much money and not considering CSR. However, the advantages greatly offset the disadvantages of CSR. Better relations with customers and augmenting the company’s revenue can be achieved when the company is taking care of society and the environment.
Conclusion- To summarize, Corporate Social Responsibility has dozens of benefits for businesses such as decreasing costs and creating better connections with customers so they cannot be attained if a company solely focuses on making more money.
Please let me know what you believe my score out of 6 would be for this.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Introduction- While some human beings think corporate responsibility should be promoted by companies, others believe corporations' only duty is increasing their revenue within the limit of law. I agree with the previous one, that states businesses should strive for the well-being of society and environment. First, if a company is socially responsible, it could decrease its costs. Secondly, corporate responsibility may bolster a business’s relationships with customers.
Body Paragraph 1- Corporate social responsibility has become a buzzword in the business world in recent years. Companies are expected to be not only profitable but also ethical and socially responsible. There are dozens of benefits of being a socially responsible company, one of the main benefits of promoting the well-being of society is profitability. The introduction of energy efficiencies and waste recycling cuts operational costs and benefits the environment. Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR) also increases company accountability and transparency with investment analyses and the media, shareholders and local communities. This in turn enhances its reputation among investors such as mutual funds that integrate CSR into their stock. The result is a virtuous circle where the company’s stock value increases and its access to investment capital is eased. For example, in 1991 Coca-Cola started using recyclable materials to make plant bottles and eventually shifted entirely to recycled materials. In that year, compared with the previous years, the company’s revenue increased by 47% and the company also kept its stakeholders satisfied.
Body paragraph 2- Another main advantage of taking CSR seriously is ensuring better customer relations. Consumers are more informed in today’s digitized environment. They understand that they have a role to play in improving this world, and as a result, partnering with socially responsible businesses gives them a sense of belonging. Most customers - 77 per cent according to a survey by branding company Landor Associates cited by the University of Pennsylvania’s Wharton School- think that companies should be socially responsible. Consumers are drawn to those companies that have a reputation for being good corporate citizens. Research at Tilburg University in the Netherlands showed that consumers are prepared to pay a 10 per cent higher price for products they deem socially responsible. To conclude, when they purchase an item from a socially responsible company, they feel proud to take a role in enhancing the well-being of society and the environment.
Counterargument(attacking)- Some people can counter-argue that a business’s only responsibility should be raising its profit on condition that it operates within the law. This view could be supported for several reasons. For instance, if a company starts to invest its resources in social responsibility, it will raise the cost of operation. There will be more money needed to produce eco-friendly products, use renewable energy resources, and recycle waste materials. All of them may increase the burden on customers by raising prices to counterbalance rising expenditure. Another point is losing sight of what matters. Sometimes when companies are fully invested in external activities that take them away from their work, they may lose sight of what matters. Companies may start doing CSR just because you get traction and attention. Some may resort to attracting several people with empty promises and hallow campaigns. All of these justify focusing on only making as much money and not considering CSR. However, the advantages greatly offset the disadvantages of CSR. Better relations with customers and augmenting the company’s revenue can be achieved when the company is taking care of society and the environment.
Conclusion- To summarize, Corporate Social Responsibility has dozens of benefits for businesses such as decreasing costs and creating better connections with customers so they cannot be attained if a company solely focuses on making more money.
Please let me know what you believe my score out of 6 would be for this.
Re: Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote
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Assignment Score: 73.75
Statistics
1. You have written 611 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 33 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 18.52.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 1 first-person pronoun (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 60%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay contains just a few words that will provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 60/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 55%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Introduction- While some human beings think corporate responsibility should be promoted by companies, others believe corporations' only duty is increasing their revenue within the limit of law.
I noticed that you started your essay with quote or a claim by a notable figure to engage your reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
Secondly, corporate responsibility may bolster a business’s relationships with customers.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 45%
Topic sentence:
Body Paragraph 1- Corporate social responsibility has become a buzzword in the business world in recent years.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 60%
Topic sentence:
Body paragraph 2- Another main advantage of taking CSR seriously is ensuring better customer relations.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have used a word commonly used when giving evidence. That's good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Counterargument(attacking)- Some people can counter-argue that a business’s only responsibility should be raising its profit on condition that it operates within the law.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph makes a very weak claim. You can improve your score by making a strong claim in the first sentence of each body paragraph that you can elaborate on with the rest of the paragraph. Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 26%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Conclusion- To summarize, Corporate Social Responsibility has dozens of benefits for businesses such as decreasing costs and creating better connections with customers so they cannot be attained if a company solely focuses on making more money.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 36% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's acceptable. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
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Vocabulary: 100%
Argument-related words: because, believe, conclude, counterargument, point, reasons, research, so, states, view
Feedback: You have used many words related to argumentation. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 44% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: analysis, benefit, create, environment, research, role, achieve, community, conclude, conclusion, consumer, focus, invest, investment, investor, item, previous, purchase, resource, survey, corporate, corporation, ensure, fund, instance, justify, partner, shift, access, integrate, promote, summarize, energy, external, revenue, cite, enhance, offset, paragraph, attain, ethical, medium, mutual
Feedback: 43% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 80%
Number of errors: 3
Feedback: I was able to detect a few errors in your writing. Do your best to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 90/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...n the Netherlands showed that consumers are prepared to pay a 10 per cent higher pr...
Feedback: When you report speech or thoughts and beliefs that happened in the past, shift the verb that follows to a past form also, "consumers were". However, backshifting of Present Simple verbs is optional if the situation is still unchanged or if you agree with the original speaker.
Suggestion: consumers were
You wrote: ...re will be more money needed to produce eco-friendly products, use renewable energy resource...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ating better connections with customers so they cannot be attained if a company so...
Feedback: Use a comma before "so" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , so
Statistics
1. You have written 611 words.
2. I count a total of 5 paragraphs.
3. You have written 33 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 18.52.
5. You have written 0 question.
6. You have used 1 first-person pronoun (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 60%
Cohesion:
You have transition words and cohesion devices in your essay to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay contains just a few words that will provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 60/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 55%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
Introduction- While some human beings think corporate responsibility should be promoted by companies, others believe corporations' only duty is increasing their revenue within the limit of law.
I noticed that you started your essay with quote or a claim by a notable figure to engage your reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
Secondly, corporate responsibility may bolster a business’s relationships with customers.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 45%
Topic sentence:
Body Paragraph 1- Corporate social responsibility has become a buzzword in the business world in recent years.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used two words commonly used for providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 60%
Topic sentence:
Body paragraph 2- Another main advantage of taking CSR seriously is ensuring better customer relations.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have used a word commonly used when giving evidence. That's good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Counterargument(attacking)- Some people can counter-argue that a business’s only responsibility should be raising its profit on condition that it operates within the law.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph makes a very weak claim. You can improve your score by making a strong claim in the first sentence of each body paragraph that you can elaborate on with the rest of the paragraph. Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Argue:
You have used multiple words commonly used in argumentation. That's excellent. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 5 - conclusion: 26%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Conclusion- To summarize, Corporate Social Responsibility has dozens of benefits for businesses such as decreasing costs and creating better connections with customers so they cannot be attained if a company solely focuses on making more money.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 36% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's acceptable. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 100%
Argument-related words: because, believe, conclude, counterargument, point, reasons, research, so, states, view
Feedback: You have used many words related to argumentation. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 44% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: analysis, benefit, create, environment, research, role, achieve, community, conclude, conclusion, consumer, focus, invest, investment, investor, item, previous, purchase, resource, survey, corporate, corporation, ensure, fund, instance, justify, partner, shift, access, integrate, promote, summarize, energy, external, revenue, cite, enhance, offset, paragraph, attain, ethical, medium, mutual
Feedback: 43% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 80%
Number of errors: 3
Feedback: I was able to detect a few errors in your writing. Do your best to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 90/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...n the Netherlands showed that consumers are prepared to pay a 10 per cent higher pr...
Feedback: When you report speech or thoughts and beliefs that happened in the past, shift the verb that follows to a past form also, "consumers were". However, backshifting of Present Simple verbs is optional if the situation is still unchanged or if you agree with the original speaker.
Suggestion: consumers were
You wrote: ...re will be more money needed to produce eco-friendly products, use renewable energy resource...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...ating better connections with customers so they cannot be attained if a company so...
Feedback: Use a comma before "so" between two independent clauses.
Suggestion: , so
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