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Constructive criticism on Argument and Issue Eassy
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13 Mar 2022, 00:37
Carcass - How are these essays?
What makes a good leader? This question has been asked and answered a million times with no resolution in sight. The prompt recommends young people to learn cooperation with each other instead of compete, in order to be prepared for leadership. In my opinion, I disagree for the following two reasons.
Competition drives innovation. The urge to do better, to be better than what our peers our, drives us to innovate and shock the world. Let’s take for example Elon Musk. Imagine for a moment that he did not feel the threat of competition from Ford, Toyota and other car manufacturers when building Tesla. Would he have been successful? No. He would not have tried to find innovative ways to build his automobile company upon a blue ocean strategy, completely different from his competition by introducing self driving electric cars with millions of customization to appease his customers. It is the competition that he faced, not cooperation from the other manufacturers, which catapulted Tesla into a multi-billion dollar company in a couple of years. If instead Toyota had cooperated and given him their designs, he would’ve created another evanescent car. Competition is the mother of innovation.
Satisfaction comes from accomplishments. When do we feel satisfied? Let’s say that tomorrow the government gives everyone the same house, equal pay, equal groceries, same car without us having to do anything at all. Would we be happy? No. It is only when we aim for something and attempt to achieve it that we feel alive. It is the hope that we get something better than our peers which motivates us to do better. This is not possible if the world just cooperates. When given everything on a platter, we slowly start withering. Let’s take for example the heirs of self made billionaires. They are born with a golden spoon. They never have to worry about fending for themselves or competing with the general population. The entire world cooperates with them just because of their parents money. It is no wonder that we never hear them achieving anything significant. They have no drive. It is only when we compete that we can achieve great heights of success.
It is true that competition can be extremely grueling, leading to people getting disheartened or even giving up, but that is what separates and creates a hierarchy in society. Hence, cooperation though important should not be superseded by the value of competition.
There can be many reasons for the reduction in the viewership of a movie. The prompt recommends increasing the budget for advertising to increase the footfall based on flawed assumptions. To be able to reach that conclusion, the following four questions need to be answered.
Was the number of movies released in the past years same as the one in which the report was conducted? It is possible that the number of movies produced in the years prior was significantly higher than the ones produced the year of the report. Consequentially, the number of people attending the movies would be higher in the previous years. It is also possible that the current year is anomalous, and one outlier in the entire dataset, which would make it very insignificant.
Was the report biased? The report was done by the marketing department. The marketing and advertising department, have historically been correlated. If the budget for the advertising department increases, the marketing department will also get a significant portion of that. It is possible that the report was not done properly, and contains many biases which favors the advertising department to get more money. The report also did not compare the footfall of other movies in the same year to the movies produced by Super Screen Movie Productions. It is highly likely that people have been going to the theater, do know about the films, but avoid it as it not as good as the other movies currently released.
The number of people who gave good reviews? It is possible that the number of people who gave reviews is very less (assume 10 people), and the number of people who gave a bad review is negligent (assume 1 person), thus making it look like the movies have positive reviews, when in fact very few people saw the films and even fewer actually took the time to review it. It is also possible that the good reviews were posted by bots, hired by the advertising department. The general public must’ve realized it and hence did not go to see the movies.
External factors? It is possible that external factors such as the pandemic affected the peoples urge to go to see the movies. Maybe the movies are genuinely good but the scare of getting infected when sitting in a closed air condition theater with random people prevented the people from going to the theatres. The reputation of the production company could also be a factor. Maybe a person in a high position did something unseemly, which has tainted the reputation of the production company, and the people are actively avoiding all movies produced by them.
Hence, the argument of the advertising director is specious at bet, and the same conclusion cannot be reached unless the above questions are addressed.
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1. The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
What makes a good leader? This question has been asked and answered a million times with no resolution in sight. The prompt recommends young people to learn cooperation with each other instead of compete, in order to be prepared for leadership. In my opinion, I disagree for the following two reasons.
Competition drives innovation. The urge to do better, to be better than what our peers our, drives us to innovate and shock the world. Let’s take for example Elon Musk. Imagine for a moment that he did not feel the threat of competition from Ford, Toyota and other car manufacturers when building Tesla. Would he have been successful? No. He would not have tried to find innovative ways to build his automobile company upon a blue ocean strategy, completely different from his competition by introducing self driving electric cars with millions of customization to appease his customers. It is the competition that he faced, not cooperation from the other manufacturers, which catapulted Tesla into a multi-billion dollar company in a couple of years. If instead Toyota had cooperated and given him their designs, he would’ve created another evanescent car. Competition is the mother of innovation.
Satisfaction comes from accomplishments. When do we feel satisfied? Let’s say that tomorrow the government gives everyone the same house, equal pay, equal groceries, same car without us having to do anything at all. Would we be happy? No. It is only when we aim for something and attempt to achieve it that we feel alive. It is the hope that we get something better than our peers which motivates us to do better. This is not possible if the world just cooperates. When given everything on a platter, we slowly start withering. Let’s take for example the heirs of self made billionaires. They are born with a golden spoon. They never have to worry about fending for themselves or competing with the general population. The entire world cooperates with them just because of their parents money. It is no wonder that we never hear them achieving anything significant. They have no drive. It is only when we compete that we can achieve great heights of success.
It is true that competition can be extremely grueling, leading to people getting disheartened or even giving up, but that is what separates and creates a hierarchy in society. Hence, cooperation though important should not be superseded by the value of competition.
Quote:
2. The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. “According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public’s lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
There can be many reasons for the reduction in the viewership of a movie. The prompt recommends increasing the budget for advertising to increase the footfall based on flawed assumptions. To be able to reach that conclusion, the following four questions need to be answered.
Was the number of movies released in the past years same as the one in which the report was conducted? It is possible that the number of movies produced in the years prior was significantly higher than the ones produced the year of the report. Consequentially, the number of people attending the movies would be higher in the previous years. It is also possible that the current year is anomalous, and one outlier in the entire dataset, which would make it very insignificant.
Was the report biased? The report was done by the marketing department. The marketing and advertising department, have historically been correlated. If the budget for the advertising department increases, the marketing department will also get a significant portion of that. It is possible that the report was not done properly, and contains many biases which favors the advertising department to get more money. The report also did not compare the footfall of other movies in the same year to the movies produced by Super Screen Movie Productions. It is highly likely that people have been going to the theater, do know about the films, but avoid it as it not as good as the other movies currently released.
The number of people who gave good reviews? It is possible that the number of people who gave reviews is very less (assume 10 people), and the number of people who gave a bad review is negligent (assume 1 person), thus making it look like the movies have positive reviews, when in fact very few people saw the films and even fewer actually took the time to review it. It is also possible that the good reviews were posted by bots, hired by the advertising department. The general public must’ve realized it and hence did not go to see the movies.
External factors? It is possible that external factors such as the pandemic affected the peoples urge to go to see the movies. Maybe the movies are genuinely good but the scare of getting infected when sitting in a closed air condition theater with random people prevented the people from going to the theatres. The reputation of the production company could also be a factor. Maybe a person in a high position did something unseemly, which has tainted the reputation of the production company, and the people are actively avoiding all movies produced by them.
Hence, the argument of the advertising director is specious at bet, and the same conclusion cannot be reached unless the above questions are addressed.
Re: Constructive criticism on Argument and Issue Eassy
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15 Mar 2022, 06:43
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The second (but the same could be applied to the first one
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Writing quality: 66%
Cohesion:
You have a number of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt.Your score for this feature = 80/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is dynamic. You write a combination of short sentences and long sentences. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 22%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 66%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
There can be many reasons for the reduction in the viewership of a movie.
I was expecting to find a question, a quote, a statistic, or an anecdote in your first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to use either a question, a quote, or a statistic to engage your readers attention at the beginning of your essay. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
To be able to reach that conclusion, the following four questions need to be answered.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 0%
Topic sentence:
Was the number of movies released in the past years same as the one in which the report was conducted?
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 0%
Topic sentence:
Was the report biased?
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 20%
Topic sentence:
The number of people who gave good reviews?
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - supporting argument: 15%
Topic sentence:
External factors?
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 6 - conclusion: 33%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Hence, the argument of the advertising director is specious at bet, and the same conclusion cannot be reached unless the above questions are addressed.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 6% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: argument, conclusion, fact, hence, reasons, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 58% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: assume, assumption, factor, significant, insignificant, affect, conclusion, conduct, positive, previous, external, release, bias, random, portion
Feedback: 15% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 70%
Number of errors: 5
Feedback: I detected a significant number of errors in your writing. Do your best to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 70/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...nomalous, and one outlier in the entire dataset, which would make it very insignificant...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: data set
You wrote: ...ired by the advertising department. The general public must’ve realized it and hence did not g...
Feedback: This is a redundant phrase. Consider using just "public".
Suggestion: public
You wrote: ... the pandemic affected the peoples urge to go to see the movies. Maybe the movies are...
Feedback: Use an -ing form. Or maybe add a pronoun? In active voice, "urge" + "to" takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: going, gonna, urge people to go
You wrote: ... prevented the people from going to the theatres. The reputation of the production compa...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: theaters, theatre
You wrote: ...uld also be a factor. Maybe a person in a high position did something unseemly, w...
Feedback: Uncountable nouns are not used with an indefinite article. The word "position" is an uncountable noun. Remove the article.
Suggestion: high position
Cohesion:
You have a number of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Add more transition words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of transitions that you can use are as follows: along the same lines, because of this, as an example, as an illustration, take the case of, to illustrate, as a matter of fact, there is no question that, without a doubt.Your score for this feature = 80/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is dynamic. You write a combination of short sentences and long sentences. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay does not contain very many words that could provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 20/100
Cliches:
I did not detect any cliches in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 22%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 66%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
There can be many reasons for the reduction in the viewership of a movie.
I was expecting to find a question, a quote, a statistic, or an anecdote in your first sentence of your introduction. There wasn't one. Remember to use either a question, a quote, or a statistic to engage your readers attention at the beginning of your essay. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
To be able to reach that conclusion, the following four questions need to be answered.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 0%
Topic sentence:
Was the number of movies released in the past years same as the one in which the report was conducted?
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 0%
Topic sentence:
Was the report biased?
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 20%
Topic sentence:
The number of people who gave good reviews?
Argue:
You have used two words commonly used in argumentation. That's good. Use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - supporting argument: 15%
Topic sentence:
External factors?
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 6 - conclusion: 33%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Hence, the argument of the advertising director is specious at bet, and the same conclusion cannot be reached unless the above questions are addressed.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 6% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 93%
Argument-related words: argument, conclusion, fact, hence, reasons, thus
Feedback: You have used a variety of words related to argumentation. That's good. Your score for this feature = 80/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 58% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: assume, assumption, factor, significant, insignificant, affect, conclusion, conduct, positive, previous, external, release, bias, random, portion
Feedback: 15% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 70%
Number of errors: 5
Feedback: I detected a significant number of errors in your writing. Do your best to eliminate any avoidable errors in your writing by rereading your essay carefully and by using a spell checker and grammar checker. Your score for this feature = 70/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...nomalous, and one outlier in the entire dataset, which would make it very insignificant...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: data set
You wrote: ...ired by the advertising department. The general public must’ve realized it and hence did not g...
Feedback: This is a redundant phrase. Consider using just "public".
Suggestion: public
You wrote: ... the pandemic affected the peoples urge to go to see the movies. Maybe the movies are...
Feedback: Use an -ing form. Or maybe add a pronoun? In active voice, "urge" + "to" takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: going, gonna, urge people to go
You wrote: ... prevented the people from going to the theatres. The reputation of the production compa...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: theaters, theatre
You wrote: ...uld also be a factor. Maybe a person in a high position did something unseemly, w...
Feedback: Uncountable nouns are not used with an indefinite article. The word "position" is an uncountable noun. Remove the article.
Suggestion: high position
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