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Grade my GRE Issue Essay Please
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24 Aug 2023, 22:08
24 Aug 2023, 22:08
Topic:
Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Essay:
In the 21st century, it is not surprising to see half the world filled with different corporations. Regardless of their size and reach, the sole purpose of a corporation after all is to earn money. Why would someone run a corporation, if not to earn money? However, along with the responsibility of earning money and following the law, they should also fulfil other responsibilities. The corporations operate in a particular environment and society and thus have equal if not more responsibility for the well-being of the environment and society than individual people living or working in the same environment.
Corporations especially largescale manufacturing companies use up environmental resources to build their product. It is thus their responsibility to not harm the environment and give back what they have taken from the environment. For example, a paper manufacturing factory fell and use tons of trees to make paper. They have the responsibility to plant double the number of trees they have felled. It is also their responsibility to not pollute the environment like the river or air with harmful chemicals that are byproducts of their manufacturing process.
Even for non-manufacturing, large corporations, I believe it is their responsibility to promote well-being in the society and environment. This would not only build a good image and reputation in the minds of people but also foster a peaceful and friendly environment. For example, companies like TATA continue to exist by building their trust in people. They continue to sponsor small startups or ideas that promote well-being for the people as well as society or the environment. For example their investment in Goodfellows- A startup to help the elderly. The people always look up to TATA and hold pride in working in such a company.
Some corporations disrupt the peaceful life of the people in the surrounding area due to the continuous clamour of their machines. These companies should have a responsibility to make amends with the people nearby in other ways like sponsoring local festivals or build new infrastructure.
Though one might say that corporations exist on give and take. Give products in return for money and thus do not hold any other responsibility but corporates too are made up of people. If people do not help people then who will? If a corporation only makes money and does not use it to promote well-being nor does it donate to charity then its reputation will only decline. People will stop buying products from the company. Humans are empathetic. They respond to emotional values and sentiments. If companies are made of people, they too should empathize with others and promote the well-being of society.
If a company exploits the environment and society to make money, it is already on the path to its downfall.
Thus I believe corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate.
Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Essay:
In the 21st century, it is not surprising to see half the world filled with different corporations. Regardless of their size and reach, the sole purpose of a corporation after all is to earn money. Why would someone run a corporation, if not to earn money? However, along with the responsibility of earning money and following the law, they should also fulfil other responsibilities. The corporations operate in a particular environment and society and thus have equal if not more responsibility for the well-being of the environment and society than individual people living or working in the same environment.
Corporations especially largescale manufacturing companies use up environmental resources to build their product. It is thus their responsibility to not harm the environment and give back what they have taken from the environment. For example, a paper manufacturing factory fell and use tons of trees to make paper. They have the responsibility to plant double the number of trees they have felled. It is also their responsibility to not pollute the environment like the river or air with harmful chemicals that are byproducts of their manufacturing process.
Even for non-manufacturing, large corporations, I believe it is their responsibility to promote well-being in the society and environment. This would not only build a good image and reputation in the minds of people but also foster a peaceful and friendly environment. For example, companies like TATA continue to exist by building their trust in people. They continue to sponsor small startups or ideas that promote well-being for the people as well as society or the environment. For example their investment in Goodfellows- A startup to help the elderly. The people always look up to TATA and hold pride in working in such a company.
Some corporations disrupt the peaceful life of the people in the surrounding area due to the continuous clamour of their machines. These companies should have a responsibility to make amends with the people nearby in other ways like sponsoring local festivals or build new infrastructure.
Though one might say that corporations exist on give and take. Give products in return for money and thus do not hold any other responsibility but corporates too are made up of people. If people do not help people then who will? If a corporation only makes money and does not use it to promote well-being nor does it donate to charity then its reputation will only decline. People will stop buying products from the company. Humans are empathetic. They respond to emotional values and sentiments. If companies are made of people, they too should empathize with others and promote the well-being of society.
If a company exploits the environment and society to make money, it is already on the path to its downfall.
Thus I believe corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate.
Re: Grade my GRE Issue Essay Please
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05 Apr 2024, 09:11
05 Apr 2024, 09:11
Expert Reply
Assignment Score: 53.25
Statistics
1. You have written 480 words.
2. I count a total of 7 paragraphs.
3. You have written 28 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 17.14.
5. You have written 2 questions.
6. You have used 2 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 63%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay contains very few words that will provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 40/100
Cliches:
Avoid using cliches. They make your writing seem empty and tiresome. Your penalty for this feature = -10
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 35%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
In the 21st century, it is not surprising to see half the world filled with different corporations.
I noticed that you started your essay with a surprising statistic to engage the reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The corporations operate in a particular environment and society and thus have equal if not more responsibility for the well-being of the environment and society than individual people living or working in the same environment.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Corporations especially largescale manufacturing companies use up environmental resources to build their product.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 30%
Topic sentence:
Even for non-manufacturing, large corporations, I believe it is their responsibility to promote well-being in the society and environment.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph makes no claim. You can improve your score by making a strong claim in the first sentence of each body paragraph that you can elaborate on with the rest of the paragraph. Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 0%
Topic sentence:
Some corporations disrupt the peaceful life of the people in the surrounding area due to the continuous clamour of their machines.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph makes no claim. You can improve your score by making a strong claim in the first sentence of each body paragraph that you can elaborate on with the rest of the paragraph. Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Though one might say that corporations exist on give and take.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 6 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
If a company exploits the environment and society to make money, it is already on the path to its downfall.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 7 - conclusion: 0%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Thus I believe corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 16% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 80%
Argument-related words: believe, thus
Feedback: You have used very few words related to argumentation. Use more. Here is an argumentation glossary to help you. Your score for this feature = 40/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 59% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: area, environment, environmental, individual, process, respond, investment, resource, corporates, corporation, promote, amends, decline, image, chemical, sole, exploit, infrastructure
Feedback: 18% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 8
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...and following the law, they should also fulfil other responsibilities. The corporation...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: fulfill
You wrote: ...me environment. Corporations especially largescale manufacturing companies use up environm...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: large scale
You wrote: ... as well as society or the environment. For example their investment in Goodfellows- A startup to...
Feedback: Put a comma after the introductory phrase "For example".
Suggestion: For example
You wrote: ... surrounding area due to the continuous clamour of their machines. These companies shou...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: glamour, clamor, cl amour, clam our
You wrote: ...o not hold any other responsibility but corporates too are made up of people. If people do...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: corporate, corp orates, corporate s
You wrote: ...t corporates too are made up of people. If people do not help people then who will...
Feedback: Where is your comma? There does not seem to be one in this sentence. Separate your if-clause from your result-clause with a comma.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...eople do not help people then who will? If a corporation only makes money and does...
Feedback: Where is your comma? There does not seem to be one in this sentence. Separate your if-clause from your result-clause with a comma.
Suggestion:
You wrote: ...is already on the path to its downfall. Thus I believe corporations have a responsib...
Feedback: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
Statistics
1. You have written 480 words.
2. I count a total of 7 paragraphs.
3. You have written 28 sentences.
4. Your average sentence length is 17.14.
5. You have written 2 questions.
6. You have used 2 first-person pronouns (I, me, my, mine).
Writing quality: 63%
Cohesion:
You have a range of transition words and cohesion devices to help your reader understand the relationship between your ideas. That's very good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Dynamism:
Your writing style is only somewhat dynamic. Increase the variance in your sentence length by writing a combination of short sentences and long sentences to increase your score. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Provocativeness:
Your essay contains very few words that will provoke an emotional reaction in your reader. Provocative words help to engage and sustain your reader's attention. Add more to increase your score. Here are some examples of words that provoke an emotional reaction in readers: awe-inspiring, brutal, children, danger, explode, fear, gorgeous, hoax, invasion... Your score for this feature = 40/100
Cliches:
Avoid using cliches. They make your writing seem empty and tiresome. Your penalty for this feature = -10
Exclamation marks:
I did not detect any exclamation marks in your writing. No penalty was applied.
Essay structure and content: 35%
Paragraph 1 - introduction: 83%
Title:
I could not detect any word with four letters or more in your title that was not capitalized. This tells me that you have capitalized your title correctly. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Opening:
In the 21st century, it is not surprising to see half the world filled with different corporations.
I noticed that you started your essay with a surprising statistic to engage the reader's attention. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Context:
I checked your introduction for words and phrases that writers use to establish the importance of their topic. I was unable to find any matches. Establish the importance of your topic with one of these phrases: a vital factor in, the leading cause of, widely considered to be, set to become, undergoing a revolution, is responsible for. There are others. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Thesis:
The corporations operate in a particular environment and society and thus have equal if not more responsibility for the well-being of the environment and society than individual people living or working in the same environment.
The last sentence uses provocative words that will make an impact on your reader. That's good. Remember that a good thesis statement should express a debatable claim that you can support with evidence and reasons. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Paragraph 2 - supporting argument: 55%
Topic sentence:
Corporations especially largescale manufacturing companies use up environmental resources to build their product.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 3 - supporting argument: 30%
Topic sentence:
Even for non-manufacturing, large corporations, I believe it is their responsibility to promote well-being in the society and environment.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph makes no claim. You can improve your score by making a strong claim in the first sentence of each body paragraph that you can elaborate on with the rest of the paragraph. Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have used a word commonly used when providing support. That's good. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Paragraph 4 - supporting argument: 0%
Topic sentence:
Some corporations disrupt the peaceful life of the people in the surrounding area due to the continuous clamour of their machines.
The first sentence of your first body paragraph makes no claim. You can improve your score by making a strong claim in the first sentence of each body paragraph that you can elaborate on with the rest of the paragraph. Here is an example of a topic sentence that makes a strong claim: We need to tax processed food with added sugar to reduce the harm it is causing. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 5 - supporting argument: 40%
Topic sentence:
Though one might say that corporations exist on give and take.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have used a word commonly used in argumentation. That's a good start. However, try to use one or two more argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 60/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 6 - supporting argument: 25%
Topic sentence:
If a company exploits the environment and society to make money, it is already on the path to its downfall.
The first sentence of this paragraph contains words that will have an impact on your reader. That's good.
Nevertheless, remember this advice: an effective topic sentence in an argument essay should make a debatable claim that the rest of the paragraph will elaborate on with reasons and examples. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Argue:
You have not used any words commonly used in argumentation. Use argumentation words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: by analogy, we can conclude, evidence, fact, fallacy, implication, follows that, it makes sense, opinion, point of view, posit, premise, proof, statistic, reason, relevance. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Evidence:
You have not used any words commonly used used when giving evidence. That's NOT good. Use one or two more words and phrases for giving evidence to get a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: according to, to quote from, tells us that, shows us that, referring to, argues that, stated, wrote, argued, discussed, expressed the concern that. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Support:
You have not used any words commonly used for providing support. Use one or two more support words and phrases for a higher score. Some examples of words that you can use are as follows: a case in point, an analogy, another way, as an example, as an illustration, consider, put another way. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Paragraph 7 - conclusion: 0%
Reformulation of the thesis:
Thus I believe corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate.
Your reformulated thesis in your conclusion is 16% the same as your thesis statement in your introduction. That's good. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Recommendation:
The paragraph contains suggestion words like
No recommendation? I checked your conclusion for advice words to see if you had recommended a course of action to your reader. I was unable to detect any of these words and their conjugations: should, must, have to, has to, ought to, recommend, propose, encourage. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Prediction:
No prediction? I checked your conclusion for prediction words to see if you had made a prediction. I was unable to detect any of these words: will, would, going to, likely to. Your score for this feature = 0/100
Vocabulary: 80%
Argument-related words: believe, thus
Feedback: You have used very few words related to argumentation. Use more. Here is an argumentation glossary to help you. Your score for this feature = 40/100
Vocabulary profile:
Feedback: 59% of your essay comprises the most common 1000 words in the language. You possess a very large vocabulary and excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Academic vocabulary profile: area, environment, environmental, individual, process, respond, investment, resource, corporates, corporation, promote, amends, decline, image, chemical, sole, exploit, infrastructure
Feedback: 18% of your essay comprises words from the academic word list. You possess a very large academic vocabulary and suggests excellent academic potential. Your score for this feature = 100/100
Language Accuracy: 35%
Number of errors: 8
Feedback: I detected many errors in your writing. Reread your essay carefully and use a spell checker and grammar checker to help you identify and eliminate avoidable errors. Your score for this feature = 35/100
Grammar Check Feedback
You wrote: ...and following the law, they should also fulfil other responsibilities. The corporation...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: fulfill
You wrote: ...me environment. Corporations especially largescale manufacturing companies use up environm...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: large scale
You wrote: ... as well as society or the environment. For example their investment in Goodfellows- A startup to...
Feedback: Put a comma after the introductory phrase "For example".
Suggestion: For example
You wrote: ... surrounding area due to the continuous clamour of their machines. These companies shou...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: glamour, clamor, cl amour, clam our
You wrote: ...o not hold any other responsibility but corporates too are made up of people. If people do...
Feedback: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: corporate, corp orates, corporate s
You wrote: ...t corporates too are made up of people. If people do not help people then who will...
Feedback: Where is your comma? There does not seem to be one in this sentence. Separate your if-clause from your result-clause with a comma.
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You wrote: ...eople do not help people then who will? If a corporation only makes money and does...
Feedback: Where is your comma? There does not seem to be one in this sentence. Separate your if-clause from your result-clause with a comma.
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You wrote: ...is already on the path to its downfall. Thus I believe corporations have a responsib...
Feedback: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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