Social media is acessible to everyone in today's world. It includes major platforms where an invividual can post their view or images in order to commuincate or keep up with the trends of today. These social media sites also include blogpost which are published online by a group or an individual person to share their views on a topic or just to write as a hobby.
This should be your introductory paragraph. However, it doe snot contain any thesis or reinstatement of the critical point about social media and the degradation of the politic panorama in the US
These blogs have a effect on the person reading it and may influence their decision making. If the person is reading the blog about a certain political incident or a political party the language used in the blog or the perspective on which the blog is constructed have the tendency of influencing the person. Moreover, this can have positive or negative impact on the person. For instancee, if there is a conflict involving a political body and the blog potrays it from a different perspective this can have a contradicting effect on the political party's reputation. Which can affect thr voter base of the party.This should be ideally your first paragraph. But
1) where are the reasons why the politics is so messy today and what and HOW the SM influence negatively the politic agenda -?
2) We do have your assessment that they influence a person. could be true or not but HOW this negative influence reflects or impact the politics arena and the debating ?
As this practice of blogs is growing very rapidly the standards for covering the news and poltical topics is declining at an alarming rate. Since everyone has the freedom to publish anything online this is proving to be fatal for the industry. For example, in earlier years the standard, the tone, quality of vocabulary was better than what we see now on these blogs and posts published by people. Use of inflated language has increased leading to wanning the quality of news.we talk of SM and politics and NOT news even though there is a relation between news and politics
Since the common public can comment on these blogs and express their views without any control on their language or vocabularly, this is taking the whole blog post comments to be filled with curse words and hate comments.Yes this could be true but it is not per see the real problem. The serious issue is quote from a magazine on line
"There might be an opportunity for the readers to comment at the end of the article,
but their responses do not contribute to flow and engagement in the same way.The problem is not the terms or vocabulary the problem is the engagement and the departed from a healthy debate
In conclusion,I agrre with the issue that blogsphere and social media has significantly affected the news covering and will inevitably decline the standards of the news and political topics. I would like to add that even though everyone has the right to free speech we should know whenit is affecting the people around them and should ue that right carefully. This can be controlled by putting in place a algorithm that can detect hate comments and delete them while notifying the user why there opinion was deleted and if the user persists in engaging with hate comments a strick action should be taken against them. Because one's right to free speech cannot be justified with posting hate comments on social media.From the conclusion paragraph or what it should be, it is not clear where you stand. agree or not. I assume you agree but is not clear
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1) the sentences are not well organized
2) a lot of grammar errors
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